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You are a high school teacher. A student of yours has just graduated with excellent marks from high school. This person wants to find work. • Explain how you feel about her high school grades. • Explain why a college education is good. • Explain why going to work instead of college is unwise.

Dear Sara, I hope this email finds you well. I am really proud of you for taking your study seriously and getting a high score in exams. I wanted to give you some advice for your bright future and I think that you should go to college instead of starting a job. After graduating from high school college is the first step in every student's journey and you shouldn't miss that. A college education is important because it gives a chance to earn a degree. Most of the high pay level jobs require a college degree nowadays. So I think that getting a college degree is a must. I know that it's tempting for many students to start a job and earn money, but I think that after the job you will find it difficult to start college. Work-life is really hectic these days and it's hard to manage. If you need money for your college, you can try doing a part-time job. I hope my suggestions help you to make a good decision for your future. Regards, xxxx
Dear Sara,

I hope this email finds you well. I am
really
proud of you for taking your study
seriously
and getting a high score in exams.
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I
wanted to give you
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some
advice for your bright future and I
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think
that you should go to college
instead
of starting a job.

After graduating from high school college is the
first
step in every student's journey and you shouldn't miss that. A college education is
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important
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because
it gives a chance to earn a degree. Most of the high pay level
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jobs
require a college degree nowadays.
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So
I
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think
that getting a college degree is a
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must
.

I know that it's tempting for
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many
students to
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start
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job
and earn money,
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but
I
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think
that after the
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job
you will find it difficult to
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start
college. Work-life is
really
hectic these days and it's
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hard
to manage. If you need money for your college, you can try doing a part-time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
. I hope my suggestions
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help
you to
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make
a
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good
decision for your future.

Regards,

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IELTS letter You are a high school teacher. A student of yours has just graduated with excellent marks from high school. This person wants to find work. • Explain how you feel about her high school grades. • Explain why a college education is good. • Explain why going to work instead of college is unwise.

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6.0
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