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Motivation Letter K Department at S University A country Dear Sir/Madam, My name is charlotte and I am writing to express my interest in the postgraduate program in International Economics at Business at S University. Since I was in senior high school, I have got enormous dreams of being a business consultant. As to personal background, my father has had a stagnant business for years, which corroborates my objectives and motivates me to assist him as a consultant. I enrolled at the X Department with a major in general management at the Y University to actualize my dream. At the end of the year, I received an honour as magna cum laude. During my studies, I have keen interests in decision making and multivariate statistics subjects because these subjects enable the company to make proper decisions by relying on quantitative that is less biased. This program would be a good fit for me because of my educational background and experience in organizations in various areas, including marketing, human resources and operations, make me have a broader understanding of those fields. I found it extremely challenging when I was a Manager of Facilities in the Students Association of Management. The organizational activities refine my leadership skills, decision-making, and critical thinking. Despite those above, to work as a consultant, I must continue to learn and expand my knowledge to broaden my perspective. Therefore, as a next step, I would like to apply for scholarship and select A country to continue my study due to the well-developed start-up ecosystem (ranked 39 out of 202), caused by the supportive environment from the government, accelerators, and investors. Besides, the study in economics and business in the international setting, especially for Advanced Strategic Management and Business Statistics and Data Mining courses, will be a great help to comprehend the organizations’ conditions and propose a strategy for clients with economic and data considerations. Furthermore, with the advancement of technology, the IoT and robotics will take place in the human resources that affect the unemployment rates, and the challenge of a business is no longer a regional scale if international economic integration has developed. Succeeding this program, I plan to work in one of a multinational consulting firm to hone my skills, thus, applying them in real-world cases. After about ten years of working, I want to start my own consulting company, which mainly focuses on start-ups and SMEs, which is obtained from my educations and experiences. As a business consultant, I could assist start-ups, including SMEs to persist in the market industry. Nevertheless, many obstacles may be faced while studying in a foreign country. I will cope with these issues by getting along with the local people to familiarize the cultures and languages, learn the host country’s the basic language of before departure, and gather with the home country communities to cope with homesickness. Finally, despite the difficulties, I will undergo this program with persistence and diligence to optimize the advantages for my beings. This scholarship will significantly support me in career growth and my dreams. Best regards, Charlotte Date: January 2nd, 2022
Motivation Letter

K Department at

S University

A country

Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is
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charlotte and
I am writing to express my interest in the postgraduate
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program
in International
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Economics
at
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Business
at S University. Since I was in senior high school, I have
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got
enormous dreams of being a
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business
consultant. As to personal background, my father has had a stagnant
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business
for years, which corroborates my objectives and motivates me to assist him as a consultant.

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I enrolled at
the X Department with a major
in general
management at the Y University to actualize my dream. At the
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end
of the year, I received an
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honour
as magna cum laude. During my studies, I have keen interests in
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decision making
and multivariate statistics subjects
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because
these subjects enable the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
to
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make
proper decisions by relying on quantitative
that is
less biased.

This
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program
would be a
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good
fit for me
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because
of my educational background and experience in organizations in various areas, including marketing, human resources and operations,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
me have a broader understanding of those fields. I found it
extremely
challenging when I was a Manager of Facilities in the Students Association of Management. The organizational activities refine my leadership
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
, decision-making, and critical thinking.

Despite those above, to work as a consultant, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
continue to learn and expand my knowledge to broaden my perspective.
Therefore
, as a
next
step, I would like to apply for scholarship and select A
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
to continue my study due to the well-developed
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
-up ecosystem (ranked 39 out of 202), caused by the supportive environment from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
, accelerators, and investors.
Besides
, the study in
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economics
and
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business
in the international setting,
especially
for Advanced Strategic Management and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Business
Statistics and Data Mining courses, will be a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to comprehend the organizations’ conditions and propose a strategy for clients with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
and data considerations.
Furthermore
, with the advancement of technology, the IoT and robotics will take place in the human resources that affect the unemployment rates, and the challenge of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
is no longer a regional scale if international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
integration has developed.

Succeeding this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
, I plan to work in one of a multinational consulting firm to hone my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
,
thus
, applying them in real-world cases. After about ten years of working, I want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
consulting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, which
mainly
focuses on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
-ups and SMEs, which
is obtained
from my educations and experiences. As a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
consultant, I could assist
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
-ups, including SMEs to persist in the market industry.

Nevertheless
,
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many
obstacles may
be faced
while studying in a foreign
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country
. I will cope with these issues by getting along with the local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to familiarize the cultures and languages, learn the host
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country’s
the basic language of
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before
departure, and gather with the home
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country
communities to cope with homesickness.

Finally
, despite the difficulties, I will undergo this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
program
with persistence and diligence to optimize the advantages for my beings. This scholarship will
significantly
support me in career growth and my dreams.

Best regards,

Charlotte

Date: January 2nd, 2022
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