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writing an email about planning going to picnic with dani

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hi Dani how are you? I am just received your email and this is something great to do during when school holidays. how about we were going to the park because there is a good choice what do you think might be good? I have great ideas when we were there is something fun to do, we can do art or journalist for to keep this joy memories then we also can take pictures to put in we journal and we also can rent a bicycle at the park to more do something can we enjoying. why don't you bring food other than a soft drink or your favourite food, pizza? I bring my dad a camera then a mat for we were to sit on.
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hi
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Dani
how are you? I am
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received your email and this is something great to do during when school holidays.
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how
about we were going to the park
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because
there is a
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choice what do you
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think
might be
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good
? I have great
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ideas
when we were there is something fun to do, we can do art or journalist for to
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keep
this joy memories then we
also
can take pictures to put in we
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journal and
we
also
can rent a bicycle at the park to more do something can
Did you mean "we're enjoying", "we are enjoying", or "we were enjoying"?
we enjoying
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why
don't you bring food other than a soft drink or your
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favourite
food, pizza? I bring my dad a camera then a mat for we were to sit on.
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IELTS letter writing an email about planning going to picnic with dani

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  American English
1 paragraphs
126 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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