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Write a letter to the hospital.

Write a letter to the hospital. QXn3
Since childhood, I am passionate about helping others. I used to help everyone around me. I feel for others which motivates me to do something better for them. As I grew up, I realized helping anyone gives me joy and pleasure. As I studied nursing during my graduation. so, I know the basics of medication very well. I can treat people with wounds and take care of them. Apart from treatment, I am able to talk with patients and console them. I am a working professional because of which I have commitments towards my company. I am easily reachable at weekends over a single call. Also, if required sometimes I can be available on-demand as well in case of emergencies.
Since childhood, I am passionate about helping others. I
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used
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help
everyone around me. I feel for others which motivates me to do something better for them. As I grew up, I realized helping anyone gives me joy and pleasure.

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
I studied nursing during my graduation.
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so
, I know the basics of medication
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very
well. I can treat
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people
with wounds and take care of them. Apart from treatment, I am able to talk with patients and console them.

I am a working professional
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because
of which I have commitments towards my
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company
. I am
easily
reachable at weekends over a single call.
Also
, if required
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sometimes
I can be available on-demand
as well
in case of emergencies.

IELTS letter Write a letter to the hospital.

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
120 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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