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Write a letter to a store manager about a small incident that took place last week. Introduce yourself, explain what happened and state what actions you want taken

Write a letter to a store manager about a small incident that took place last week. Introduce yourself, explain what happened and state what actions you want taken 7l76
Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Amit Mangotra and I am writing to draw your attention to a small accident that took place last week in Champion store on Regent Street in Paris and I hope that necessary actions will be taken to avoid recurrence of such accidents. Last Friday, I was shopping at the store when I heard a lady scream in the neighbouring aisle. When I went upto her, I found that the elderly lady was in a state of shock, her glasses were lying on the floor and a staff member was apologizing to her. After about five or ten minutes, when the lady had calmed down, she described what had happened. A packet of rice weighing 250g had fallen on her head while the staff member was trying to count the rice inventory on the top shelves. Although the item was not heavy, the impact threw her glasses to the ground, she was visibly taken aback and had screamed. I would like that new guidelines be implemented immediately to avoid a repeat of such events. The inventory counting exercise should be carried out during non peak hours when there are few customers. Moreover, the staff should ensure that the entire aisle is vacant when they underake this activity. Imagine, what would have happened if the packet that fell on the lady's head was heavier. Look forward to a swift response, Yours sincerely, Amit Mangotra
Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is Amit
Mangotra and
I am writing to draw your attention to a
small
accident that took place last week in Champion store on Regent Street in Paris and I hope that necessary actions will
be taken
to avoid recurrence of such accidents.

Last Friday, I was shopping at the store when I heard a lady scream in the
neighbouring
aisle. When I went
upto
her, I found that the elderly lady was in a state of shock, her glasses were lying on the floor and a staff member was apologizing to her. After about five or ten minutes, when the lady had calmed down, she
described
what had happened. A packet of rice weighing 250g had fallen on her head while the staff member was trying to count the rice inventory on the top shelves. Although the item was not heavy, the impact threw her glasses to the ground, she was
visibly
taken aback and had screamed.

I would like that new guidelines
be implemented
immediately to avoid a repeat of such
events
. The inventory counting exercise should
be carried
out during
non peak
hours when there are few customers.
Moreover
, the staff should ensure that the entire aisle is vacant when they
underake
this activity. Imagine, what would have happened if the packet that fell on the lady's head was heavier.

Look forward to a swift response,

Yours
sincerely
,

Amit
Mangotra
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IELTS letter Write a letter to a store manager about a small incident that took place last week. Introduce yourself, explain what happened and state what actions you want taken

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
236 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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