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Write a letter to a job recruiter requesting for a job opportunity as a software developer.

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Dear Sir, I am from Nepal with a bachelor’s degree in mechanical engineering from Nanjing University of Aeronautics and Astronautics, China. I plan to pursue a master’s degree in Computer Science and Engineering at the University of Minnesota or the University of St. Thomas. As the cost for a master’s degree tried to dissuade me from applying there, I came across the job posting for a software developer Co-op at Entrust. An opportunity to work in such an entrusted company will help me in my studies. Work experience in a telecom software company such as ZTEsoft/ whale-cloud has enhanced the knowledge that assists me in this position. Although most of my time was spent on handling the project as an assistant of a project manager such as admin, site survey, installation of servers in data-center, and overall deployment of software beginning from the software requirement specification(SRS) phase till babysitting, I took extra time to learn other technical skills such as SQL, Unix shell scripts, cybersecurity, and networking. After quitting my job due to my mother's health and economic condition during the pandemic, I have been helping my family in business and learning coding and other essentials. Now that I wanted to pursue my education in the United States, I am worried that the price to get into it will obstruct me from achieving my goal. Therefore, I am hunting for jobs that help fund my schooling and align with my interest and skills. However, numerous complications could avoid me from getting this job. I do not yet possess any VISA. Yet to get one, I need to secure my place at the University of Minnesota or from the University of St. Thomas. Or another option could be a VISA sponsor from Entrust Corp. Nevertheless, I would not trouble the company for this, although I would be highly delighted. For the reasons mentioned, I would love to know my chances for the position of Software Developer for a part-time job as I will have to take time to study. Please refer to my CV and transcripts for further information. I will merrily be looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you. Sincerely Yours, Junesh Gautam
Dear Sir,

I am from Nepal with a bachelor’s degree in mechanical engineering from Nanjing
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University
of Aeronautics and Astronautics, China. I plan to pursue a master’s degree in Computer Science and Engineering at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
of Minnesota or the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
of St. Thomas.

As the cost for a master’s degree tried to dissuade me from applying there, I came across the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
posting for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
developer Co-op at Entrust. An opportunity to work in such an entrusted
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in my studies.

Work experience in a telecom
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software
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
such as
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ZTEsoft
/ whale-cloud has enhanced the knowledge that assists me in this position. Although most of my time
was spent
on handling the project as an assistant of a project manager such as admin, site survey, installation of servers in data-center, and
overall
deployment of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
beginning from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
requirement specification(SRS) phase till babysitting, I took extra time to learn other technical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
such as SQL, Unix shell scripts, cybersecurity, and networking. After quitting my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
due to my mother's health and economic condition during the pandemic, I have been helping my family in business and learning
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coding
and other essentials.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
that I wanted to pursue my education in the United States, I
am worried
that the price to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
into it will obstruct me from achieving my goal.
Therefore
, I am hunting for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
fund my schooling and align with my interest and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

However
, numerous complications could avoid me from getting this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
. I do not
yet
possess any VISA.
Yet
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
one, I need to secure my place at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
of Minnesota or from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
of St. Thomas. Or another option could be a VISA sponsor from Entrust Corp.
Nevertheless
, I would not trouble the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
for this, although I would be
highly
delighted.

For the reasons mentioned, I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to know my chances for the position of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Software
Developer for a part-time
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job
as I will
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have to
take time to study.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
refer to my CV and transcripts for
further
information. I will
merrily
be looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you.

Sincerely
Yours,

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Junesh
Gautam
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IELTS letter Write a letter to a job recruiter requesting for a job opportunity as a software developer.

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  American English
9 paragraphs
363 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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