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The students of your class are going to celebrate the graduation. You want to book tables in a restaurant and want to have some other recreational activities. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant, asking him to arrange the party.

The students of your class are going to celebrate the graduation. You want to book tables in a restaurant and want to have some other recreational activities. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant, asking him to arrange the party. GWjpB
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Nguyen Hoang Nam. I am living in 7 Jamaica Plain, Boston. I and my classmates are going to celebrate graduation next week in your restaurant. Therefore, I am writing to give you some information about the reservation. First of all, we have a total of 40 students, so I think it could be 4 tables in the room. The second one is about the food served at the restaurant. I would like to have a barbecue and dessert at the end of the party. In addition, for a more fun atmosphere to the party, I would appreciate it if you could hold some leisure activities such as singing and dancing. I prefer to listening classical or jazz music. Finally, If you have any requests about cleaning the room after the party, please let me know. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Nam Nguyen
Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Nguyen
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Hoang
Nam. I am living in 7 Jamaica Plain, Boston. I and my classmates are going to celebrate graduation
next
week in your restaurant.
Therefore
, I am writing to give you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information about the reservation.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, we have a total of 40 students,
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so
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it could be 4 tables in the room. The second one is about the food served at the restaurant. I would like to have a barbecue and dessert at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the party.
In addition
, for a more fun atmosphere to the party, I would appreciate it if you could hold
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
leisure activities such as singing and dancing. I prefer to
Did you mean "listen"?
listening
classical or jazz music.
Finally
, If you have any requests about cleaning the room after the party,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know.

I am looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Nam Nguyen
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IELTS letter The students of your class are going to celebrate the graduation. You want to book tables in a restaurant and want to have some other recreational activities. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant, asking him to arrange the party.

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  American English
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154 words
6.0
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