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working as part time worker and found some issue on job

working as part time worker and found some issue on job 6j23

Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Muhammad Ahmed and I am working in your store as part time receiving clerk for last two months. I am writing this letter to point out some issues which I found in your store, I opt for this job because it will help me for my future experience and current studies as I am doing masters in Supply chain management and receiving is one of the main operations in supply chain. I have found that, there is a huge wastage in fresh section during weekdays due to placing same order whole week. Moreover, many time item get wasted without being place in selling area. We have to apply supply and demand rule in store specially for short life items. By this we can increase our profit margin as well as deliver fresh item to our customer every time I hope you will consider this letter and investigate the issue. Yours faithfully, Muhammad Ahmed

Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is Muhammad Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).Ahmed, and
Ahmed and
 I am working in your store as This word is normally spelled with hyphen.part-time
part time
 receiving clerk for last two months. I am writing this letter to point out This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 issues which I found in your store,

I opt for this job This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 me for my future experience and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :contemporarymodern
current
 studies as I am doing masters in Supply chain management and receiving is one of the main operations in supply chain.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 have found that, there is a huge wastage in fresh section during weekdays due to placing same order whole week. Moreover
, Did you mean "many times" or "much time"?many timesmuch time
many time
 item This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 wasted without being place in selling area.

We This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 apply supply and demand This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirement
rule
 in store specially
 for short life items. By this we can increase our profit margin as well
 as deliver fresh item to our customer every time

I hope you will consider this letter and investigate the issue.

Yours faithfully
,

Muhammad Ahmed