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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer ljjBJ
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter for the issue faced by me because of sharing my accommodation with a colleague. David, my colleague is an avid smoker and drinker. The reason for this condition is due to tension between his parents, although he was never like this. Being an asthma patient, I am getting affected physically and mentally because of his changed behavior. Although, I have tried to sort the issue with him in a matured way but the outcome hasn't been encouraging. As a result of which, my health has started to deteriorate. All the more it’s also affecting my studies. Concentrating on my studies have become extremely difficult for me. Given the current scenario, I would request to provide me with single room occupancy. Although, if might be difficult for you to make such an arrangement at this point, I am ready to pay additional charges for the same. The doctor's prescription for my medical condition is also attached herewith for your perusal. It's my humble request to consider my request at the earliest and provide relieve me from this mental trauma. Thanking you in anticipation. Yours sincerely, Mark
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter for the issue faced by me
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because
of sharing my accommodation with a colleague.

David, my colleague is an avid smoker and drinker. The reason for this condition is due to tension between his parents, although he was never like this. Being an asthma patient, I am getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
physically
and mentally
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changed
behavior. Although, I have tried to sort the issue with him
Consider replacing "in a matured way" with the adverb for "matured"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a matured way
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the outcome hasn't been encouraging.

As a result
of which, my health has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to deteriorate. All the more it’s
also
affecting my studies. Concentrating on my studies have become
extremely
difficult for me.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Given
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
scenario, I would request to provide me with single room occupancy. Although, if might be difficult for you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
such an arrangement at this point, I am ready to pay additional charges for the same. The doctor's prescription for my medical condition is
also
attached herewith for your perusal.

It's my humble request to consider my request at the earliest and provide relieve me from this mental trauma.

Thanking you in anticipation.

Yours
sincerely
,

Mark
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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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6.5
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