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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part time voluntary / unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary work. in you letter explain why you want to do voluntary work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part time voluntary / unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary work. in you letter explain why you want to do voluntary work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work g55Ja
Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Maayan Apelboim and I live a few blocks from the "History Museum of Israel". I saw your flyer regarding the voluntary part time position in the museum and I'm writing you to apply for this job. Working in a museum has been my dream since I was a little girl, and therefore I completed my bachelor degree a few weeks ago in order to accomplish this goal. This opportunity would fit me prefectly and help me get some hands-on experience Not only I'm a team player, great with following instructions, always on time and not afraid of new challenges, but I believe the knowledge I aquired during my studies will be extremely relevant for this position. I'll be available to start from next week on Mondays and Wednesdays. I really hope you'll accept me to this position and waiting to hear back from you soon. Best regards, Maayan Apelboim
Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is
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Maayan
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Apelboim
and I
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live
a few blocks from the
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History Museum of Israel
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.

I
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saw
your flyer regarding the voluntary
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part time
position in the museum and I'm writing you to apply for this job.

Working in a museum has been my dream since I was a
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little
girl, and
therefore
I completed my bachelor degree a few weeks ago in order to accomplish this goal. This opportunity would fit me
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prefectly
and
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help
me
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get
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some
hands-on
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experience


Not
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only
I'm a team player, great with following instructions, always on time and not afraid of new challenges,
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but
I believe the knowledge I
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aquired
during my studies will be
extremely
relevant for this position.

I'll be available to
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start
from
next
week on Mondays and Wednesdays.

I
really
hope you'll accept me to this position and waiting to hear back from you
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soon
.

Best regards,

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Maayan
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Apelboim

IELTS letter A museum near your home is looking for people to do part time voluntary / unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary work. in you letter explain why you want to do voluntary work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work

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