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visiting friend for holiday in his region

visiting friend for holiday in his region yP09d
Hello Naveen, How have you been since we last met? I thought I'd drop you a line to let you know that I'm interested in holidaying to your region. I've been working hard in office for past quarter under high pressure for achieving target. Now as things are a bit relaxed, the idea of taking leave to explore unknown area hit my mind and I started searching possible destinations around the country. During search, I found Bikaner is an interesting one to adventure and I also got reminded that you live in the same area. I was hoping if you can guide me what're some good hotels to stay in Bikaner and is near to places which can be visited during the stay as I prefer not to spend much time in traffic. Also, if you can share me an itinerary for two weeks duration mentioning important places with one or two lines description and locations which can be given visit for tasting local cuisines. I'm also interested to visit a market to purchase few art crafts prepared by local talent to take back home. I've read that Bikaner is hot during the day and cold at night which's confusing me what kind of clothes should I pack. Could you please help me out here to solve this issue? I'm really excited to see you as the memories of our childhood is flouring in my mind at the moment and I can't express my spirit in the words here. I'll book tickets once you reply to my letter. What's new with you? I really look forward to hearing from you soon. Best Regards Shantanu Bhardwaj.
Hello Naveen,

How have you been since we last met? I
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thought
I'd drop you a line to
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let
you know that I'm interested in holidaying to your region. I've been working
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hard
in office for past quarter under high pressure for achieving target.
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Now
as things are a bit relaxed, the
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idea
of taking
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leave
to explore unknown area hit my mind and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
searching possible destinations around the country. During search, I found Bikaner is an interesting one to adventure and I
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
reminded that you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in the same area. I was hoping if you can guide me what're
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some
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good
hotels to stay in Bikaner and is near to places which can
be visited
during the stay as I prefer not to spend much time in traffic.
Also
, if you can share me an itinerary for two weeks duration mentioning
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important
places with one or two lines description and locations which can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
visit for tasting local cuisines. I'm
also
interested to visit a market to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
few art crafts prepared by local talent to take back home. I've read that Bikaner is hot during the day and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
at night which's confusing me what kind of clothes should I pack. Could you
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please
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help
me out here to solve this issue? I'm
really
excited to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you as the memories of our childhood is flouring in my mind at the moment and I can't express my spirit in the words here. I'll book tickets once you reply to my letter. What's new with you? I
really
look forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Best Regards
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Shantanu
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Bhardwaj
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IELTS letter visiting friend for holiday in his region

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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