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Tree have been several complaints about reception area where visitors of your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved .

Tree have been several complaints about reception area where visitors of your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. kwRn
Dear Mr. Bornboss, I am writing to bring to your attention some very recent issues being dealt with at the reception area as well as my estimated measures that should be taken for its improvement. To start with, the most frequently received complaint raised by visitors is the pointless long waiting queue before they are seen right. On top of that, there is a lack of ventilation system. The only air conditioning system in the area is malfunctioning and keeps making funny noise. Most importantly, there is no one available in charge of the line of visitors. The reception area is putting the first impression on our clients and thus it is making a substantial contribution to the growth of our business. The mentioned area will portray the positive image of our company providing the customers are treated very well. Regarding future, this will have a significant constructive impact on the company’s business. To improve this situation, I believe, it is highly recommended to welcome customers when they enter the building with a token that is issued by a line keeper so that they can sit and fill out their forms while they are waiting for their turn. This will ameliorate the present chaotic situation at the reception area. Lastly, the defective air conditioning needs to be replaced as it may cause more serious problems in future. . I hope the new changes will make the reception desk a better place for the clients. Yours sincerely, Mahdi Niazi
Dear Mr.
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Bornboss
,

I am writing to bring to your attention
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some
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very
recent issues
being dealt
with at the
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reception
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area
as well
as my estimated measures that should
be taken
for its improvement.

To
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start
with, the most
frequently
received complaint raised by visitors is the pointless long waiting queue
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before
they are
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seen
right.
On top of that
, there is a lack of ventilation system. The
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only
air conditioning system in the
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area
is malfunctioning and
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keeps
making
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funny
noise. Most
importantly
, there is no one available in charge of the line of visitors.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reception
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
is putting the
first
impression on our clients and
thus
it is making a substantial contribution to the growth of our business. The mentioned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
will portray the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
image of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
providing the customers
are treated
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very
well. Regarding future, this will have a significant constructive impact on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
’s business.

To
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improve
this situation, I believe, it is
highly
The verb 'recommended' is used with the gerund form: "recommended welcoming".
recommended to welcome
customers when they enter the building with a token that
is issued
by a line keeper
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they can sit and fill out their forms while they are waiting for their turn. This will ameliorate the present chaotic situation at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reception
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
.
Lastly
, the defective air conditioning needs to
be replaced
as it may cause more serious problems
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.


I hope the new
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changes
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reception
desk a better place for the clients.

Yours
sincerely
,

Mahdi
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Niazi
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IELTS letter Tree have been several complaints about reception area where visitors of your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved.

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