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Today, family members eat fewer meals together . why is this?. Is this positive or negative development?

Today, family members eat fewer meals together. why is this? . Is this positive or negative development? XoAaA
In this contemporary era, family members do not have enough time to take meal with each other. Yet, this essay will shed light on the parameters responsible behind this phenomenon and i admit it is a negative advancement. To embark with, there are myraid things to be shared to manifest why blood relatives do not eat food together? . First and foremost, in this cutting-edge era, everyone have a hectic schedule. To be more specific, individuals spend lots of time aylt their wookroom as they do effort more than normal working hours. Because of these anti-social timetables the parents usually shortage of time to attend kins meals. juveniles also like to live alone in their rooms and use electonic gadgets. To epitome, in the past, masses do labour at least sir hours, but now they need to do tasks more than nine hours. Therefore, when the breedwinter come at home, other members might be doing other work so they do not take lunch, dinner or breakfast together. On the other hand, there are some conclusive ideas to support its negative development such as it decrease the bonding of relations. To be more precised, if habitants do not abundance time to take their family then they will not understand each other and may never take aid from other members in ticklish situations. It may also leads depression among chinldren when their parents do not give plenty of time to them. For example, a suvey conducted by indian government in 2009 found that 80% out of 100% offsprings suffer from pyschological menace beacause of thire guradians do not give time to them To recapitulate, after agglomerating all aspects I would like to reiterate that while parents a busy making money for the future, they miss the precious time. As a result, their kids may never be developed well.
In this contemporary era, family members do not have
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enough
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time
to take meal with each
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other
.
Yet
, this essay will shed light on the parameters responsible behind this phenomenon and
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i
admit it is a
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negative
advancement. To embark with, there are
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myraid
things to
be shared
to manifest why blood relatives do not eat food together?
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First
and foremost, in this cutting-edge era, everyone
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have
a hectic schedule. To be more specific, individuals spend lots of
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time
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aylt
their
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wookroom
as they do effort more than normal working hours.
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Because
of these anti-social timetables the parents
usually
shortage of
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time
to attend
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kins
meals.
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juveniles
also
like to
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live
alone in their rooms and
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use
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electonic
gadgets. To epitome, in the past, masses do
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labour
at least sir hours,
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but
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now
they need
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to do
tasks more than nine hours.
Therefore
, when the
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breedwinter
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come
at home,
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other
members might be doing
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other
work
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so
they do not take lunch, dinner or breakfast together. On the
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other
hand, there are
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some
conclusive
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ideas
to support its
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negative
development such as it decrease the bonding of relations. To be more
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precised
, if habitants do not abundance
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time
to take their family then they will not understand each
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other
and may never take aid from
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other
members in ticklish situations. It may
also
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leads
depression among
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chinldren
when their parents do not give
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plenty
of
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time
to them.
For example
, a
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suvey
conducted by
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indian
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government
in 2009 found that 80% out of 100%
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offsprings
suffer from
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pyschological
menace
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beacause
of
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thire
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guradians
do not give
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to them To recapitulate, after agglomerating all aspects I would like to reiterate that while parents a busy making money for the future, they miss the precious
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time
.
As a result
, their kids may never
be developed
well.
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IELTS letter Today, family members eat fewer meals together. why is this? . Is this positive or negative development?

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