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you have seen an advertisement of a valuable piece of equipment. Write a letter to your manager and ask him to buy that product to be used in your company.

you have seen an advertisement of a valuable piece of equipment. Write a letter to your manager and ask him to buy that product to be used in your company. Xo9JP
Dear Mr Raman, I hope you are doing well and the GTSFI project is on track. Reaching out to apprise you of an exciting new tool I came across during my trip to Japan last month. We can leverage this tool to make the meetings more engaging and effective. OwlCam, as it is called, is an Artificial Intelligence enabled Room Camera, suitable for cross geographical teams to work together as if they were in the same room. Along with 4K streaming capability, it has voice and motion detection sensors which enable the camera to zoom on to the person who is talking. Once we install these devices in our meeting rooms, it will take away the pain of people having to come forth to speak about something. Teams can just sit there and have an engaging discussion and effortlessly, the people (yes even multiple) talking will be visible on the VC big screen. These cameras are still new to the market, so the company manufacturing them is taking a limited number of orders. We can place an evaluation request for 8 devices, for our 3 office locations and run a pilot program to evaluate their effectiveness. Please do not hesitate to reach out in case you need more information about this device. Yours faithfully, Harshvardhan Dadhich
Dear Mr
Raman
,

I hope you are doing well and the
GTSFI
project is on
track
. Reaching out to apprise you of an exciting new tool I came across during my trip to Japan last month. We can leverage this tool to
make
the meetings more engaging and effective.

OwlCam
, as it
is called
, is
an Artificial Intelligence
enabled Room Camera, suitable for cross geographical teams to work together as if they were in the same room. Along with 4K streaming capability, it has voice and motion detection sensors which enable the camera to zoom on to the person who is talking.

Once we install these devices in our meeting rooms, it will take away the pain of
people
having to
come
forth to speak about something. Teams can
just
sit there and have an engaging discussion and
effortlessly
, the
people
(yes even multiple) talking will be visible on the VC
big
screen.

These cameras are
still
new to the market,
so
the
company
manufacturing them is taking a limited number of orders. We can place an evaluation request for 8 devices, for our 3 office locations and run a pilot program to evaluate their effectiveness.

Please
do not hesitate to reach out in case you need more information about this device.

Yours
faithfully
,

Harshvardhan
Dadhich
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IELTS letter you have seen an advertisement of a valuable piece of equipment. Write a letter to your manager and ask him to buy that product to be used in your company.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
215 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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