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The local government is planning to change the bus timetable. You are not happy about the proposed changes. You have decided to write about it to the editor of a local newspaper. v.3

The local government is planning to change the bus timetable. You are not happy about the proposed changes. You have decided to write about it to the editor of a local newspaper. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a local resident of Bexley, London writing to express my concerns regarding the suggested changes in the bus timetable by the local government. I hope you would publish an editorial regarding the inconveniences these changes are going to cause to the local people. In relation to the proposed changes, the authority is planning to reduce the frequency of the bus on route 25 and 28. The current frequency of the bus is every 20 minutes, however, the local administration plans to cut down the frequency to a bus to one in an hour. Moreover, the first bus will depart at 7. 00 am rather than 6. 00 am. As you can understand, such drastic changes to the schedule will adversely affect the commuters. Currently, I have to report to work at 7: 00 am, therefore, I board the bus that arrives at 6. 00 am. If the current timetable were to change, I will face great difficulties in getting to work on time. In my opinion, the bus frequency needs to be increased rather than decreased, so that the travellers who have to leave for work before the sunrise can be accommodated in a better way. Further, I would suggest that the transport authority should also consider replacing the older buses to improve the overall travel experience. I hope you will publish my concerns in your newspaper so that people can express their opinion on this and the proposed changes are reconsidered. Yours faithfully, Muhammad Sameed
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a
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local
resident of
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Bexley
, London writing to express my concerns regarding the suggested
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changes
in the bus timetable by the
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local
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government
. I hope you would publish an editorial regarding the inconveniences these
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changes
are going to cause to the
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local
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people
.

In relation to the proposed
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changes
, the authority is planning to
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reduce
the
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frequency
of the bus on route 25 and 28. The
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current
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frequency
of the bus is every 20 minutes,
however
, the
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local
administration plans to
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cut
down the
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frequency
to a bus to one in an hour.
Moreover
, the
first
bus will depart at 7. 00 am
rather
than 6. 00 am.

As you can understand, such drastic
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changes
to the schedule will
adversely
affect the commuters.
Currently
, I
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have to
report to work at 7: 00 am,
therefore
, I board the bus that arrives at 6. 00 am. If the
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current
timetable were to
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change
, I will face great difficulties in getting to work on time.

In my opinion, the bus
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frequency
needs to
be increased
rather
than decreased,
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so
that the
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travellers
who
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have to
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leave
for work
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before
the sunrise can
be accommodated
in a better way.
Further
, I would suggest that the transport authority should
also
consider replacing the older buses to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the
overall
travel experience.

I hope you will publish my concerns in your newspaper
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so
that
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people
can express their opinion on this and the proposed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changes
are reconsidered
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Muhammad
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Sameed
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter The local government is planning to change the bus timetable. You are not happy about the proposed changes. You have decided to write about it to the editor of a local newspaper. v. 3

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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