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The following is a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Tria Erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island is a serious threat to our island and our tourist industry In order to stop the erosion we should charge people for usi

The following is a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Tria Erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island is a serious threat to our island and our tourist industry In order to stop the erosion we should charge people for usi yXL5l
A letter to the head of tourism bureau, on the island of Tria, addressed the threat to tourism caused by the erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island. The arguer has suggested a few measures that can be put in place to help the tourism industry on Tria Island over a long term. According to the arguer, there may be an initial resentment to the measures, by the tourists, but on a longer run, it will prove beneficial to Tria Island. The measures suggested by the arguer seem convincing on the first glance, although a close examination might unearth a few alternate possibilities that might undermine the arguer's position. Firstly, the arguer suggests that the island of Tria should charge tourists who use the beach. According to him, it might annoy the tourists in the short term, but it will raise money to replenish the sand lost due to erosion. The arguer seems confident about such an approach, and that it will generate enough money to replenish the lost sand. The arguer fails to consider the possibility in which the number of tourists, visiting the island of Tria decreases and ultimately ceases. If such a situation occurs, due to the the tourist's displeasure of having to pay for using the beach, it may so happen that there would be not enough money collected to replenish the sand on the beaches of Tria, moreover they might even loose the tourists who visit Tria. Such a situation calls into question, the plausibility of the arguer's suggestion, regarding replenishment of sand on the beaches of Tria. Secondly, the arguer has stated that replenishing the sand will help protect the buildings near the shores of Tria. The arguer bolsters his claim by citing similar measures taken by a nearby island Batia and the success they achieved with such an approach. The arguer fails to present the geographical similarities between the island of Batia and Tria. It might be the case that the buildings, in the island of Tria are not affected by the severe storms that it encounters. It might be possible that the buildings are susceptible to other forms of natural calamities. As a result, it might happen that replenishing that sand, on the beaches of Tria has not helped protect the buildings present along the shore of the island. Such a situation would affect the tourism in Tria and undermine the arguer's position. Lastly, the arguer has stated that tourism on the island of Tria will improve over the long run. The arguer fails to quantify the term " long run" . It might be the case that long run resembles ten-years or it might resemble fifty-years. If the later situation holds true, the island of Tria might face grave financial repercussions as a result of the loss in tourism, and it would take them a long time to recover from such a financial stress. If this situation comes into fruition, it will seriously affect the arguer's stand, regarding the new proposal. In sum, the evidence provided by the arguer are erroneous and dubious. They do not bolster the arguer's position, rather they undermine the arguer's suggestion and call into question his reasoning behind such a proposal.
A letter to the head of
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tourism
bureau, on the
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island
of
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Tria
, addressed the threat to
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tourism
caused by the erosion of
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beach
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sand
along the shores of
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Tria
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Island
. The arguer has suggested a few
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measures
that can
be put
in place to
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help
the
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tourism
industry on
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Tria
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Island
over a
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long
term. According to the arguer, there may be an initial resentment to the
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measures
, by the
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tourists
,
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but
on a longer run, it will prove beneficial to
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Tria
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Island
. The
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measures
suggested by the arguer seem convincing
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on
the
first
glance, although a close examination
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might
unearth a few alternate possibilities that
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might
undermine the arguer's position.

Firstly
, the arguer suggests that the
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island
of
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Tria
should charge
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tourists
who
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use
the
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beach
. According to him, it
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might
annoy the
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tourists
in the short term,
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but
it will raise money to replenish the
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sand
lost due to erosion. The arguer seems confident about such an approach, and that it will generate
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enough
money to replenish the lost
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sand
. The arguer fails to consider the possibility in which the number of
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tourists
, visiting the
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island
of
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Tria
decreases and
ultimately
ceases. If such a
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situation
occurs, due to
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the the
tourist's displeasure of having to pay for using the
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beach
, it may
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so
happen that there would be not
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enough
money collected to replenish the
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sand
on the
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beaches
of
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Tria
,
moreover
they
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might
even loose the
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tourists
who visit
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Tria
. Such a
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situation
calls into question, the plausibility of the arguer's suggestion, regarding replenishment of
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sand
on the
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beaches
of
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Tria
.

Secondly
, the arguer has stated that replenishing the
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sand
will
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help
protect the
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buildings
near the shores of
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Tria
. The arguer bolsters his claim by citing similar
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measures
taken by a nearby
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island
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Batia
and the success they achieved with such an approach. The arguer fails to present the geographical similarities between the
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island
of
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Batia
and
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Tria
. It
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might
be the case that the
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buildings
, in the
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island
of
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Tria
are not
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affected
by the severe storms that it encounters. It
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might
be possible that the
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buildings
are susceptible to other forms of natural calamities.
As a result
, it
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might
happen that replenishing that
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sand
, on the
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beaches
of
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Tria
has not
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helped
protect the
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buildings
present along the shore of the
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island
. Such a
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situation
would affect the
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tourism
in
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Tria
and undermine the arguer's position.

Lastly
, the arguer has stated that
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tourism
on the
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island
of
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Tria
will
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improve
over the
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run. The arguer fails to quantify the term
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It
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might
be the case that
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long
run resembles ten-years or it
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might
resemble fifty-years. If the later
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situation
holds true, the
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island
of
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Tria
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might
face grave financial repercussions
as a result
of the loss in
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tourism
, and it would take them a
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long
time to recover from such a financial
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stress
. If this
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situation
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comes
into fruition, it will
seriously
affect the arguer's stand, regarding the new proposal.

In sum, the evidence provided by the arguer are erroneous and dubious. They do not bolster the arguer's position,
rather
they undermine the arguer's suggestion and call into question his reasoning behind such a proposal.
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IELTS letter The following is a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Tria Erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island is a serious threat to our island and our tourist industry In order to stop the erosion we should charge people for usi

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