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The company you work for is going to introduce a change to the way its products are advertised.

The company you work for is going to introduce a change to the way its products are advertised. xOEgN
Dear all staff members, I am writing to inform you of the changing the way of advertising our latest products. As the survey we did a couple of months ago shows clearly, the volume of sales has been still dropping down. Therefore, the products will be needed to recreate with the new advertisement. First, we would like to start posting the new ads on the web site from next week as just like a trial. Let's see what will go on. Best regards,
Dear all staff members,

I am writing to inform you of the changing the way of advertising our latest products.

As the survey we did a couple of months ago
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shows
clearly
, the volume of sales has been
still
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "dropping".
dropping down
.
Therefore
, the products will
be needed
to recreate with the new advertisement.
First
, we would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
posting the new ads on the
Did you mean "website"?
web site
from
next
week as
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just
Comparison is written 'as just "as"'.
like
a trial.
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Let
's
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see
what will go on.

Best regards,
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IELTS letter The company you work for is going to introduce a change to the way its products are advertised.

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
83 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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