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: The company you work for believes in allowing professionals to identify their areas of opportunity and helps them find programs suited to their needs or requirements. In other words, the management’s rather unwilling to instruct professionals to work on courses that they (management) believe is aligned to their (professionals) needs. In this regard, your manager has asked you to identify at least three to four core areas that you feel you need training to further enhance your skills, and the reasons justifying the needs. Write a mail to your manager, providing him/her the requested information. Provide reasons and examples to support your points.

: The company you work for believes in allowing professionals to identify their areas of opportunity and helps them find programs suited to their needs or requirements. In other words, the management’s rather unwilling to instruct professionals to work on courses that they (management) believe is aligned to their (professionals) needs. In this regard, your manager has asked you to identify at least three to four core areas that you feel you need training to further enhance your skills, and the reasons justifying the needs. Write a mail to your manager, providing him/her the requested information. Provide reasons and examples to support your points. BWAmp
Hi (Manager’s Name), This is with regard to the training and development program we discussed earlier; I would like to attend myself for the following three training programs. 1. US GAAP - Delivery by specialist accounting trainers 2. Oracle latest version 12. 2 – General Ledger applications 3. Leadership Development & Company Culture Training The first two can be helpful to enhance my ongoing career in professional life and the third one will be helpful to improve my skills in managing the people in professional life and personal life as well. Request you to nominate my name for the above training programs and I will make sure that our day to day deliverables will not affect due to this. Also, I wish to attend your choice of training program if you could suggest one.
Hi (Manager’s Name),

This is with regard to the
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training
and development
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program
we discussed earlier; I would like to attend myself for the following three
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training
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programs. 1
. US
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GAAP
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Delivery by specialist accounting
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trainers


2. Oracle
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latest
version 12. 2
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General Ledger applications

3. Leadership Development &
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Company
Culture
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Training


The
first
two can be helpful to enhance my ongoing career in professional life and the third one will be helpful to
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improve
my
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skills
in managing the
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people
in professional life and personal life
as well
.

Request you to nominate my name for the above
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training
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programs
and I will
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make
sure that our
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day to day
deliverables will not affect due to this.

Also
, I wish to attend your choice of
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training
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program
if you could suggest one.

IELTS letter : The company you work for believes in allowing professionals to identify their areas of opportunity and helps them find programs suited to their needs or requirements. In other words, the management’s rather unwilling to instruct professionals to work on courses that they (management) believe is aligned to their (professionals) needs. In this regard, your manager has asked you to identify at least three to four core areas that you feel you need training to further enhance your skills, and the reasons justifying the needs. Write a mail to your manager, providing him/her the requested information. Provide reasons and examples to support your points.

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8 paragraphs
134 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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