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Talk about yourself, my life and my family

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Hello everyone. I'm My. I'm nearly 15 years old. I come from Vietnam. I'm currently a seventh-grader student at Nguyen Van Troi sencondary school. I have a big passion for english. Honesstly, i'm a person of many hobbies. Swimming is one of my hobbies. It helps me get a lean body and have a good health. There are five people in my family. My father is working as a herding and my mother is a worker
Hello everyone. I'm My. I'm
nearly
15 years
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I
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come
from Vietnam.
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I
'm
currently
a seventh-grader student at Nguyen Van
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Troi
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sencondary
school.
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I
have a
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big
passion for
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english
.
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Honesstly
,
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i'm
a person of
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many
hobbies. Swimming is one of my hobbies. It
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helps
me
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get
a lean body and have a
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good
health. There are five
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people
in my family. My father is working as a herding and my mother is a
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worker
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IELTS letter Talk about yourself, my life and my family

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
75 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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