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your office building does not have a cafeteria. describe the problem suggest where the cafeteria could be built say hoe it benefit the employees

your office building does not have a cafeteria. describe the problem suggest where the cafeteria could be built say hoe it benefit the employees aJpAP

Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing in connection to make a request about a cafeteria that we don't have in our office building. I am Ladan Zamiri, one of your employees. I think we need a place for cafeteria in our building because, some of us work for 8 hours or more. If we could have a coffee or tea between working hours, help us to continue more powerful and energetic. We can be gathering for our colleague's birthday or celebrate our success. In many situations, we forced to stay there for overtime and required some snacks until we arrived home. I wonder if it is possible for you considered a place for cafeteria. I suggest the free room on the fourth floor. It is so huge and could be a good option to prepare for café. I think this place could have some advantages for all employees. First, we can get to know each other better, get acquainted with different attitudes in the field of work and in addition it doesn't need to going out to buy coffee or snacks. I look forward to hearing back from you soon. Yours sincerely,

Dear Mr. Smith,

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 a request about a cafeteria that we don't have in our office building.

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Yours sincerely
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