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Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing to find out about specific availability of certain electrical goods for our office premises being constructed in your neighbouring town of Raichur. Since you are the authorised dealers of the brand that we want to use and closest to us, we want to know some details from you before we approach other dealers around the place. We are looking for tubelights and bulbs newly advertised by the brand Green wave - which promises better efficiency and lesser carbon footprint. We want the entire office space to use the same brand to provide an overall reduction in pollution and internal costs. We are looking at 500 units of tube-lights (slim category) and 200 bulbs including the switchboards and other cables that go with it. If you could give us a heads up on the quantity available with you and also give us a quotation with competitive rates, we would like to place the order immediately. Also once we place the order, we would want the delivery to be done within a weeks time to match our other schedules of construction and internal works. Looking forward to a good deal from your end. Yours faithfully, Abid Hassan Assistant production engineer

Dear Sir / Madam,

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Yours faithfully
,

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Assistant production engineer