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Requesting the accommodation officer to change the room because of the roommate

Requesting the accommodation officer to change the room because of the roommate 1VQaN
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to let you know that I am not fully satisfied with my current living conditions. While the accommodation facilities are fine, my roommate is doing intolerable things and making it almost impossible for me to work. I hope you will consider my situation and expecting certainly a positive outcome. Let me elaborate on my situation. Things were working smoother with the old housemate, however, this all began when a new housemate joins in. Since it was his first time when he starts living without guardians. He was not at all aware of the ethics to live in the shared room. He lives in a completely unorganized manner. Starting with scattering the clothes all over in the room, to leaving unwashed dishes after dinner in the sink. Later, I have to look after all the cleaning procedures to maintain a living standard. These all are overburdening me and hence, I am unable to concentrate on my studies. Would you kindly either move me out or my housemate to another room? I would much prefer to live with someone who can manage his belongings more appropriately. So that I need not worry about the surroundings. As long as, the basic living etiquettes are being followed. I am open to share a room with anybody. Thank you for considering my situation. Yours faithfully, Akshay
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to
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let
you know that I am not
fully
satisfied with my
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current
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living
conditions. While the accommodation facilities are fine, my roommate is doing intolerable things and making it almost impossible for me to work. I hope you will consider my situation and expecting
certainly
a
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positive
outcome.

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Let
me elaborate on my situation. Things were working smoother with the
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old
housemate,
however
, this all began when a new housemate
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joins
in. Since it was his
first
time when he
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starts
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
without guardians. He was not at all aware of the ethics to
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live
in the shared
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
. He
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
in a completely unorganized manner. Starting with scattering the clothes all over in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
, to leaving unwashed dishes after dinner in the sink. Later, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
look
after all
the cleaning procedures to maintain a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
standard. These all are overburdening me and
hence
, I am unable to concentrate on my studies.

Would you kindly either
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
me out or my housemate to another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
? I would much prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with someone who can manage his belongings more
appropriately
.
“So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
So that
I need not worry about the surroundings. As long as, the basic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
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etiquettes
are
being followed
. I am open to share a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
with anybody.

Thank you for considering my situation.

Yours
faithfully
,

Akshay
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IELTS letter Requesting the accommodation officer to change the room because of the roommate

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
229 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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