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Dear Dr Anderson, Re: Mr. Daniel McCrae, DOB: 17. 10. 1962 I am writing to refer Mr. McCrae, a 52-year-old barrister. I would be grateful if you could access him for adenocarcinoma of ascending colon as soon as possible. Mr. McCrae is a married man who lives with 4 children. He is a smoker and his BMI is 28. 1. Initially, he presented to me on 19. 09. 13 with signs and symptoms suggestive of viral infection. Therefore, I prescribed him paracetamol and recommended to take rest for 3 days until symptoms disappeared. On 08. 02. 14, he visited me again as he was feeling tired and he had never totally recovered from previous infection. He also complaint of abdominal discomfort, diarrhoea alternating with constipation and fatigue. However, he did not have the family history of colorectal carcinoma, colonic polyps or inflammatory bowel disease. All the examinations were normal. Today, he comes back with test results which revealed reduced Hb (91), increased Hct (34%), positive FOBT and abnormal colonoscopy. Therefore, biopsy was taken and adenocarcinoma was diagnosed. I would greatly appreciate your further assessment and ongoing management of this patient. If you require any further information, please do not hesitate to contact me. Yours sincerely, Doctor
Dear Dr Anderson,

Re: Mr. Daniel
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McCrae
, DOB: 17. 10. 1962

I am writing to refer Mr.
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McCrae
, a 52-year-
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old
barrister. I would be grateful if you could access him for adenocarcinoma of ascending colon as
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soon
as possible.

Mr.
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McCrae
is a married
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man
who
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lives
with 4 children. He is a smoker and his BMI is 28. 1.

Initially
, he presented to me on 19. 09. 13 with signs and symptoms suggestive of viral infection.
Therefore
, I prescribed him paracetamol and
The verb 'recommended' is used with the gerund form: "recommended taking".
recommended to take
rest for 3 days until symptoms disappeared.

On 08. 02. 14, he visited me again as he was feeling
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tired and
he had never
totally
recovered from previous infection. He
also
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complaint
of abdominal discomfort,
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diarrhoea
alternating with constipation and fatigue.
However
, he did not have the family history of colorectal carcinoma,
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colonic
polyps or inflammatory bowel disease. All the examinations were normal.

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Today
, he
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comes
back with
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test
results which revealed
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reduced
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Hb
(91), increased
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Hct
(34%),
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positive
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FOBT
and abnormal colonoscopy.
Therefore
, biopsy
was taken
and adenocarcinoma
was diagnosed
.

I would
greatly
appreciate your
further
assessment and ongoing management of this patient. If you require any
further
information,
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please
do not hesitate to contact me.

Yours
sincerely
,

Doctor

IELTS letter referring a patient to surgeon

Letter
  American English
10 paragraphs
205 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
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