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Read the email from your new online English friend, Mark. Then write a reply of about 50-70 words, answering his questions. To: From: Mark I'm very happy to be your online friend. Please write and tell me about yourself. Have you got a big family? What music do you like? What subjects do you enjoy at school?

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Hi Mark, At first, thanks for your email, Mark. I'm Su from the new online English school. I'm twenty-seven years old and works as an accountant. I come from a big family that has my parents, two elder brothers and one younger sister. I'm Burmese and from Myanmar. I live with my family in Yangon that's one of my favorite city and my hometown too. Do you also come from a big family? Where do you live? and who do you live with? I love listening to music very much. So I spend most of my free time listening to a lot of songs with different music styles such as pop, rock and classical songs. One of my favorite singer is Bruno Mars who's brilliant and can also write songs well. His popular songs like 'Just the way you are' and 'Count on me' are my favorite. Do you like to listen to music? Who's your favorite singer? Moreover I enjoy watching movies at home too. I love watching movies which are mostly romance, real-life films and I also like some fantasy movies like X men, Spider-Man and Avatar movies. How do you spend your free time? Grammar, writing and speaking are my favorite subjects. I enjoy learning Grammar because I can understand it easily. After that I also like thinking when I write. That's why I like writing too. And then I really happy whenever I speak with my new friends and discuss our ideas about our lessons or share our favorite things in our new Online class. What subject do you like most? What make you enjoy in our online class? Write me back and see you soon. All the best, Su

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