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Part 2: topic family, talk a bout your family

Part 2: topic family, talk a bout your family kL6kR
Hello everyone. My name is Ánh. My full name is Tran Minh Anh. Today I would like to talk about my happy family - an extended family. There are 6 people in my family – My grandma, my parents, my sister, my younger brother, and me. My grandma is a farmer, sometimes she helps my parents take care of my younger brother who is just 4 years ago. My dad is a worker, and my mom is an accountant, they always work from 8 am to 5 pm. And my sister and I are still students, so we also study at school from 8 am to 5 pm. However, my family often tries our best to spend time by hanging out or having dinner together at some restaurants and some beautiful places at the weekend. We have quality time perfectly. I really love this and my family.
Hello everyone. My name is
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Ánh
. My full name is Tran
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Minh
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Anh
.
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Today
I would like to talk about my happy
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family
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-
an extended
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family
. There are 6
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people
in my
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–
My grandma, my parents, my sister, my younger brother, and me. My grandma is a farmer,
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sometimes
she
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helps
my parents take care of my younger brother who is
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just
4 years ago. My dad is a worker, and my mom is an accountant, they always work from 8 am to 5 pm. And my sister and I are
still
students,
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so
we
also
study at school from 8 am to 5 pm.
However
, my
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family
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often
tries our best to spend time by hanging out or having dinner together at
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some
restaurants and
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some
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beautiful
places
The phrase 'at the weekend' is a British English expression, which is used the same way as "on the weekend" in American English.
at the weekend
. We have quality time
perfectly
. I
really
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love
this and my
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family
.
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IELTS letter Part 2: topic family, talk a bout your family

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
147 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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