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ou booked a two-week holiday to Sydney with Fly-by Night Travel. You are not happy with the holiday-the flight delayed,the hotel was noisy and so on. Write to agency to complain about the holiday giving deatails about the problems. Request some compensation or refund.

ou booked a two-week holiday to Sydney with Fly-by Night Travel. You are not happy with the holiday-the flight delayed, the hotel was noisy and so on. Write to agency to complain about the holiday giving deatails about the problems. Request some compensation or refund. 7bXn
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writting to complain about a holiday which i booked in your travel agency. I traveled to Sydney on 5th May and returned on 19th May. I thought it would be a dream holiday, however, it have been my worst trip ever. I have so many problems with this journey. Firstly, the flight was delayed. I know that is not only your fault, but I hoped I vould be at the hotel at 4pm not at 11pm. Secondly, in your brochure I read this is a quity hotel, mainly families stay here. Despite this I saw only two families, another tourists were young who wanted parting all day. Moreover, the hotel was in the centre of the city, beetwen a pub and a disco. Finally, I booked for all-inclusive, but I have to pay for the dinner. I had been looking forward to my holiday, but I was very disappointed. Therefore I feel you should refund half the cost of the holiday. I am look forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Anna Brown
Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am
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writting
to complain about a holiday which
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i
booked in your travel agency. I traveled to Sydney on 5th May and returned on 19th May.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
it would be a dream holiday,
however
, it
Did you mean "has"?
have
been my worst trip ever.
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I
have
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so
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many
problems with this journey.

Firstly
, the flight
was delayed
. I know
that is
not
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only
your fault,
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but
I hoped I
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vould
be at the hotel at 4pm not at 11pm.
Secondly
, in your brochure I read this is a
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quity
hotel,
mainly
families stay here. Despite this I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
two families, another tourists were young who wanted parting all day.
Moreover
, the hotel was in the
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
of the city,
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beetwen
a pub and a disco.
Finally
, I booked for all-inclusive,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
pay for the dinner.

I had been looking forward to my holiday,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
disappointed.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
I feel you should refund half the cost of the holiday.

I am look forward to your prompt response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Anna Brown
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IELTS letter ou booked a two-week holiday to Sydney with Fly-by Night Travel. You are not happy with the holiday-the flight delayed, the hotel was noisy and so on. Write to agency to complain about the holiday giving deatails about the problems. Request some compensation or refund.

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