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Museum visited last month

Museum visited last month J38q5
Dear shraddha I hoping you are great, i am writing to you to explain my canada journey. I have just returned home an excited trip to canada and visiting national museum of canada. I cannot wait to share my experience with you. I stayed in canada for one week and on second day, we went to the museum of canada, located in torrento, next to the national birds and art museum. I actually impressed by the fabulous collection of art. The entrance and interior is beautiful blew my mind away. Museum has a wonderful architecture wall which was designed in one hundred century ago. The main reason to attraction is paint which is used hundred years ago but still it is looking like just before some times before painted. There are many attraction place were you can spend time but i like it most rathar than other. I wish you had been with me there. I would like to ask you if you have to spend you valueable time with art and museum you should visit this museum wherever possible Warm wishes Krunal patel
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time with art and
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Warm wishes

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IELTS letter Museum visited last month

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