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Motivation Letter Motivation Letter

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Hi, my name is Tugce, and I want to be part of your ESC project. Before I applied, I did research on your website about your organization, and I can tell you that we are definitely at the same point. Your organization is very old and very old. You're doing a great job of helping and supporting young people and society that are really important today. The point of this motivation is to introduce myself a little bit more. You probably saw it on my Résumé, I'm 25 and I'm Turkish. By the end of this year, I'm going to graduate from the Department of Public Education Social Services. I had the opportunity to work in 2 different departments related to the department I read. The first was the social services agency. The other was a kindergarten. I worked with the kids for a very short period, but it was a great experience. I've learned a lot about them. They have incredible energy, so I started yoga to keep up with their energy. And I'm still going. It had a positive effect on my life. If I talk about myself, I like to walk. I don't have a particular music style, I listen to any music that sounds good. Here's what I can tell you about my character traits. I have a harmonious and curious build. As my hobbies, I love taking pictures (as amateurs) and seeing new places. I didn't get a chance to know new people because of Covid, so I hope I can catch this opportunity on your project. Why should we choose you? let me answer your question. When I first saw your project, I had 3 things in mind. I thought of young people, children, and older people. I'm so excited to be able to help socially. I also think my experience of working with children will benefit from adaptation. Topics I can contribute to your project, activities for children, presentation of my country. I think that my basic German level can evolve with them. I can work for a year, and I can fit in as best I can.
Hi, my name is
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Tugce
, and I want to be part of your ESC project.
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Before
I applied, I did research on your website about your organization, and I can
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tell
you that we are definitely at the same point.

Your organization is
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very
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old
and
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very
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old
. You're doing a great job of helping and supporting young
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people
and society that are
really
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important
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today
.

The point of this motivation is to introduce myself a
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little bit
more.

You
probably
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saw
it on my Résumé, I'm 25 and I'm Turkish. By the
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end
of this year, I'm going to graduate from the Department of Public Education Social Services. I had the opportunity to work in 2
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different
departments related to the department I read.

The
first
was the social
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services
agency. The other was a kindergarten. I worked with the kids for a
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very
short period,
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but
it was a great experience. I've learned a lot about them. They have incredible energy,
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so
I
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started
yoga to
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keep
up with their energy. And I'm
still
going.

It had a
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positive
effect on my life. If I talk about myself, I like to walk. I don't have a particular music style, I listen to any music that sounds
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good
. Here's what I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you about my character traits. I have a harmonious and curious build. As my hobbies, I
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love
taking pictures (as amateurs) and seeing new places. I didn't
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get
a chance to know new
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people
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because
of
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Covid
,
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so
I hope I can catch this opportunity on your project.

Why should we choose you?
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let
me answer your question.

When I
first
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saw
your project, I had 3 things in mind.

I
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thought
of young
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people
, children, and older
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people
. I'm
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so
excited to be able to
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help
socially
.
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I
also
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think
my experience of working with children will benefit from adaptation.

Topics I can contribute to your project, activities for children, presentation of my country. I
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think
that my basic German level can evolve with them. I can work for a year, and I can fit in as best I can.
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IELTS letter Motivation Letter Motivation Letter

Letter
  American English
10 paragraphs
355 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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