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letter to principal for proposal from organisation Saafsaans

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Respected Madam With due respect, I Kavya Sood, student of class 11-E, is presenting a proposal offered by an organisation saafsaans. I was recently approached by this organisation. It is a student-based organisation that works for environmental cause. It provides students with a platform to volunteer and provides internship and a lot of certifications which is beneficial for any students’ career. Mr. Akshay, the Chief Executive Officer recently got selected in University of California, Los Angeles and volunteering for Saafsaans played a major role in his selection. This organisation opens chapters more like a sub organisation in the schools, they collaborate with. They have recently collaborated with Delhi Public School and Sri Venkateshwar International School and have received a great response from them and almost 70+ students volunteered for it. Saafsaans has 800+ members in its organisation till date. They have conducted 10+ walkathons and protests since 2019 and are continuing to do so even in online mode. They will be providing a great platform to our school students, and some might even get a chance to become a permanent member. If we introduce this in our school, then they will form a club in our school. They would conduct a zoom meeting with students to make them familiar with their organisation. They will talk about all the benefits a student can avail after being a part of it. They will provide students with a google form where the students choose if they want to become a co-president or if they want to volunteer. After going through the forms, they will select 12 co-presidents who will be the head of various departments. For e. g. - a student can opt for becoming a co-president for the department of News posts or Digital/Fine Artist or a Social Media manager, Content Creator for Blogs or Articles. The co-presidents will be able to avail more benefits. They will form an Instagram page called saafsaans. qvs where the work done by the students will be posted. For reference, you can visit Saafsaans and saafsaans. svis on Instagram to get an idea about the organisation and how the school page looks like. Saafsaans- https: //www. instagram. com/p/CQkq_MbDtdc/? utm_source=ig_web_copy_link saafsaans. svis- https: //www. instagram. com/p/CQoHCMBJkKP/? utm_source=ig_web_copy_link saafsaans. krmgk2- https: //www. instagram. com/p/CQVcs4djbB7/? utm_source=ig_web_copy_link Students volunteering for this would not be burdened with work. It will be more like if a student has opted to volunteer for fine arts or is a co-president for the same, must give 2 paintings per month or someone from the editing department will have to give one short video per month. This organisation is really looking forward to collaborating with our school. It will be really appreciated if the school management decides to take this forward. Please let me know about the decision take by the management so that saafsaans can send a formal invite to our school. I will be eagerly waiting for the response. Thanks Regards Kavya Sood Student of 11-E, Q. V. S
Respected Madam

With due respect, I
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Sood
,
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student
of
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11-E, is presenting a proposal offered by an
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organisation
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saafsaans
. I was recently approached by this
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organisation
. It is a student-based
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organisation
that works for environmental cause. It provides
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students
with a platform to volunteer and provides internship and
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a lot of
certifications which is beneficial for any
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students’
career.

Mr. Akshay, the Chief Executive Officer recently
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got
selected in University of California, Los Angeles and volunteering for
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Saafsaans
played a major role in his selection. This
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organisation
opens chapters more like a sub
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organisation
in the
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schools
, they collaborate with. They have recently collaborated with Delhi Public
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School
and Sri
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Venkateshwar
International
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School
and have received a great response from them and almost 70+
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students
volunteered for it.

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Saafsaans
has 800+ members in its
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organisation
till date. They have conducted 10+
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walkathons
and protests since 2019 and are continuing to do
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so
even in online mode. They will be providing a great platform to our
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school
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students
, and
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some
might even
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get
a chance to become a permanent member.

If we introduce this in our
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school
, then they will
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form
a club in our
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school
. They would conduct a zoom meeting with
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students
to
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make
them familiar with their
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organisation
. They will talk about all the benefits a
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student
can avail after being a part of it.
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They
will provide
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students
with a
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google
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form
where the
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students
choose if they want to become a co-president or if they want to volunteer.

After going through the
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forms
, they will select 12 co-presidents who will be the head of various departments. For
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e. g.
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-
a
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student
can opt for becoming a co-president for the department of News posts or Digital/Fine Artist or a Social Media manager, Content Creator for Blogs or Articles. The co-presidents will be able to avail more benefits. They will
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form
an Instagram page called
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saafsaans
.
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qvs
where the work done by the
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students
will
be posted
.

For reference, you can visit
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Saafsaans
and
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saafsaans
.
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svis
on Instagram to
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get
an
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idea
about the
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organisation
and how the
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school
page looks like.

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Saafsaans
-
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https
: //
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.
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instagram
.
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_
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/?
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_source=
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ig
_
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web_copy
_link

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saafsaans
.
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svis
-
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https
: //
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.
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instagram
.
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/p/
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/?
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_source=
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ig
_
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_link

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.
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-
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: //
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.
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.
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com
/p/CQVcs4djbB7/?
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_source=
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_
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Students volunteering for this would not
be burdened
with work. It will be more like if a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
has opted to volunteer for fine arts or is a co-president for the same,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
give 2 paintings per month or someone from the editing department will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
give one short video per month.

This
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organisation
is
really
looking forward to collaborating with our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. It will be
really
appreciated if the
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school
management decides to take this forward.
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Please
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let
me know about the decision take by the management
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so
that
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saafsaans
can
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send
a formal invite to our school.

I will be
eagerly
waiting for the response.

Thanks

Regards

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Sood


Student of 11-E, Q. V. S
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IELTS letter letter to principal for proposal from organisation Saafsaans

Letter
  American English
12 paragraphs
494 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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