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Letter to friend seeking advice to change job.

Letter to friend seeking advice to change job. eExqA
Dear Martin, I hope you are well and are having a good time vacationing in England and visiting your family. I am writing to let you know that I am planning to switch my job. I have been working in the field of data analytics for almost 2 years now. It is indeed a high-paying job and I have been able to perform well until now. But, I still don't enjoy my work as it is more of a monotonous activity that I am doing each day. The work is repetitive and I am not getting enough opportunities to learn new skills. I have hence decided to switch to the field of software development as I believe that there is a lot of scope in this role to learn new things. With the technology changing each day, this would help me learn new skills and this is something that I have always longed for. Since you have been working as a software developer for quite some time now, I need you to share some tips and also help me figure out which companies should I target to get placed in? Also, as Microsoft is a great player in the field of software development, I would be grateful if you can refer me to your organization too. Hope to hear from you soon. Regards, Eshan
Dear Martin,

I hope you are well and are having a
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good
time vacationing in England and visiting your family. I am writing to
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let
you know that I am planning to switch my job.

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I
have been working in the field of data analytics for almost 2 years
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now
. It is
indeed
a high-paying job and I have been able to perform well until
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now
.
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But
, I
still
don't enjoy my work as it is more of a monotonous activity that I am doing each day. The work is
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repetitive and
I am not getting
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enough
opportunities to learn new
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skills
. I have
hence
decided to switch to the field of software development as I believe that there is
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a lot of
scope in this role to learn new things. With the technology changing each day, this would
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help
me learn new
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skills
and this is something that I have always longed for.

Since you have been working as a software developer for quite
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some
time
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now
, I need you to share
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some
tips and
also
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help
me figure out which
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companies
should I target to
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get
placed in?
Also
, as Microsoft is a great player in the field of software development, I would be grateful if you can refer me to your organization too. Hope to hear from you
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soon
.

Regards,

Eshan
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IELTS letter Letter to friend seeking advice to change job.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
223 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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