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Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. v.3

Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, Last week, I took one of your direct flights to fly from Kuala Lumpur to London. My flight date was 27th June and the flight number was NR-15478. But, unfortunately, when I left the plane, I left my cross-body bag in it. However, I came to know about the lost bag only after I had arrived at my hotel when I needed to show my hotel reservation documents to the hotel authority. I always hang that men’s bag around my shoulder, but, when I was flying your aircraft and sat near the block D, I, unfortunately, left it in the overhead locker above the seats. And that’s probably what caused me to forget about the bag. To give you some idea about my bag and its contents, it is a brown colour leather bag which is about 10 inches wide, 12 inches long and 6 inch in diameter and is made by Kenneth Cole. The bag contains important documents from my office, copies of my travel documents, as well as personal items like hair clipper (comb), trimmer and an ebook reader. So, once you find the bag, please give me a call and then courier it to my office address which is attached on one side of the bag at your earliest convenience. If this is not possible, I can visit your office and collect it myself. Yours faithfully, Mitchel Moore
Dear Sir or Madam,

Last week, I took one of your direct flights to
fly
from Kuala Lumpur to London. My flight date was 27th June and the flight number was NR-15478.
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But
, unfortunately, when I
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left
the
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plane
, I
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left
my cross-body
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bag
in it.

However
, I came to know about the lost
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bag
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only
after I had arrived at my hotel when I needed to
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show
my hotel reservation documents to the hotel authority. I always hang that
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men
’s
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bag
around my shoulder,
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but
, when I was flying your aircraft and sat near the block D, I, unfortunately,
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left
it in the overhead locker above the seats. And that’s
probably
what caused me to forget about the bag.

To give you
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some
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idea
about my
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bag
and its contents, it is a brown
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colour
leather
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bag
which is about
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10 inches
wide,
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12 inches
long and
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6 inch
in diameter and
is made
by Kenneth Cole. The
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bag
contains
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important
documents from my office, copies of my travel documents,
as well
as personal items like hair clipper (comb), trimmer and an
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ebook
reader.

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So
, once you find the
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bag
,
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please
give me a call and then courier it to my office address which
is attached
on one side of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
at your earliest convenience. If this is not possible, I can visit your office and collect it myself.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mitchel Moore
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
234 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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