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Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. v.2

Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing regarding a bag that I left on one of your planes last week. On 24th November, I travelled to London on flight FRC- 2547-A  from Sydney. According to my ticket, my seat number was D-5A. The bag contains some important documents which I need immediately. I am hoping you would help me find the lost bag. After I reached my hotel in London, I realised I had left my bag on the plane under the seat in front of me. I felt pretty silly about the mistake. My bag is small in size and is made of brown leather with a zip on the top. Inside the bag, I have put a credit card, a debit card, a book that I was reading titled 'War and Peace' by Leo Tolstoy, some car keys, my mobile phone and some important business documents. I need these documents within a few days and they are very important to me. I, therefore, request you to have your lost property department check and see if they have my bag and contact me as soon as possible. I can be reached on my mobile phone +0299465467484 or on my email at This email address is being protected from spambots. You need JavaScript enabled to view it. . Thanking you in advance for your kind cooperation. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Sharon Mond
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing regarding a
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bag
that I
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left
on one of your
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planes
last week. On 24th November, I travelled to London on flight FRC- 2547-A
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from Sydney. According to my ticket, my seat number was D-5A. The
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bag
contains
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some
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important
documents which I need immediately. I am hoping you would
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help
me find the lost bag.

After I reached my hotel in London, I
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realised
I had
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left
my
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bag
on the
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plane
under the seat in front of me. I felt pretty silly about the mistake. My
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bag
is
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small in size
and
is made
of brown leather with a zip on the top. Inside the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
, I have put a credit card, a debit card, a book that I was reading titled 'War and Peace' by Leo Tolstoy,
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some
car keys, my mobile phone and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
business documents. I need these documents within a few
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days and
they are
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very
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important
to me.

I,
therefore
, request you to have
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your
lost property department
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check
and
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see
if they have my
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bag
and contact me as
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soon
as possible.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
can
be reached
on my mobile phone +0299465467484 or on my email at This email address is
being protected
from
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spambots
. You need JavaScript enabled to view it.
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.


Thanking you in advance for your kind cooperation. I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Sharon
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Mond
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
237 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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