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Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. v.4

Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regards to a lost bag on a plane that I took to reach London from New York on 17th August. Unfortunately, I forgot my bag on the plane. When I reached the hotel, I realised I had left my bag. I am hoping you would help me recover it along with its content immediately. My flight number was VG-4587F and my seat number was D-54A. Onboard, I kept the bag under my seat as all the overhead bins were filled with bags and luggage. When I left the airport in London, I forget to take my bag with me. It is a black leather bag, medium in size and has two pockets in the front and one in the back. Also, it has a silver zip and keychain on it. My bag contains some important documents, a few dresses of mine and a small brown purse which had my ID card, driving licence, and some cash. The documents in the bag are really significant and I need to submit them to my office next week. So if you could help me find the bag, I would be really grateful. I can come and collect it from the airport promptly. Thank you for your kind attention and cooperation. Yours faithfully, Sonia Vincent
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
a lost
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bag
on a
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plane
that I took to reach London from New York on 17th August. Unfortunately, I forgot my
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bag
on the
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plane
. When I reached the hotel, I
Possible spelling mistake. 'realised' is British English.
realised
I had
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left
my
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bag
. I am hoping you would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me recover it along with its content immediately.

My flight number was VG-4587F and my seat number was D-54A. Onboard, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
under my seat as all the overhead bins
were filled
with
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bags
and luggage. When I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
the airport in London, I forget to take my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
with me. It is a black leather
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
,
A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
medium in size
and has two pockets in the front and one in the back.
Also
, it has a silver zip and
Possible spelling mistake found.
keychain
on it.

My
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bag
contains
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some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
documents, a few dresses of mine and a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
brown purse which had my ID card, driving
Possible spelling mistake. 'licence' is British English.
licence
, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
cash. The documents in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
are
really
significant and I need to submit them to my office
next
week.
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So
if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me find the
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bag
, I would be
really
grateful.

I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
and collect it from the airport
promptly
. Thank you for your kind attention and cooperation.

Yours
faithfully
,

Sonia Vincent
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you left the plane, you left a bag. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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