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You are an international student and have borrowed a book from the local public library. You left the book on a bus and when you contacted the bus company, they could not find it. v.1

You are an international student and have borrowed a book from the local public library. You left the book on a bus and when you contacted the bus company, they could not find it. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that I have borrowed a book from your library on 08th January but lost it on a bus. I am an international student and have been a member of the library for more than six months. I am seeking your advice and would really appreciate your guidance regarding this. I borrowed the book 'Basic Economics' by Thomas Sowell on 08th January for a duration of four days using my library card which is 254731025. Unfortunately, during my visit to my aunt's house the day before yesterday, I missed it on the bus that I took. I contacted the bus authority and they could not inform me about the book. I assume it has been lost and I would need your help to follow the procedure under this circumstance. I am not completely aware of the process a member has to follow to compensate for a lost book. However, I am ready to pay the full amount to buy another copy of the book or can do it myself if you want. I would really appreciate your response regarding this. Thank you in advance. Yours faithfully, Michael Keaton
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you that I have borrowed a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
from your library on 08th January
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
lost it on a bus. I am an international student and have been a member of the library for more than six months.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am seeking your advice and would
really
appreciate your guidance regarding this.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
borrowed the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
'Basic Economics' by Thomas
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Sowell
on 08th January for a duration of four days using my library card which is 254731025. Unfortunately, during my visit to my aunt's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
the day
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
yesterday, I missed it on the bus that I took. I contacted the bus
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
authority and
they could not inform me about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
. I assume it has
been lost
and I would need your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to follow the procedure under this circumstance.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am not completely aware of the process a member
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
follow to compensate for a lost
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
.
However
, I am ready to pay the full amount to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
another copy of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
or can do it myself if you want.

I would
really
appreciate your response regarding this.

Thank you in advance.

Yours
faithfully
,

Michael Keaton
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Learning another language is not only learning different words for the same things, but learning another way to think about things.
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IELTS letter You are an international student and have borrowed a book from the local public library. You left the book on a bus and when you contacted the bus company, they could not find it. v. 1

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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