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Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some holiday photos. v.9

Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some holiday photos. v. 9
Dear Phillip, It is so great to hear from you guys! Hope you all are doing fine. Just so you know, I am so happy and glad that you have sent me all those fabulous pictures from our short-lived but precious holidays that we enjoyed in your country last month. No doubt, your country, Italy, is way more exotic and beautiful than what I initially expected. The food, lakes, coastline, colosseums, Venice canals, streets, shopping mall – all were so amazingly gorgeous! By the way, I would also like to especially thank you for organizing the trip to Venice canals for me because I thought that I was too tired to visit that exceptionally dreamy place. You all look so great in those pictures! However, I am so sorry that I could not write to you earlier as I got insanely busy with my works, emails and papers which I needed to take care of immediately after coming back from that holiday. But, I surely would like for all of you to come and visit me in the next month when my office will remain closed for a few days. Yours sincerely, Roger Stone
Dear Phillip,

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great to hear from you guys! Hope you all are doing fine.
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you know, I am
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happy and glad that you have
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me all those fabulous pictures from our short-
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lived
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precious holidays that we enjoyed in your country last month.

No doubt, your country, Italy, is way more exotic and
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beautiful
than what I
initially
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expected
. The food, lakes, coastline,
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colosseums
, Venice canals, streets, shopping mall
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–
all were
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so
amazingly
gorgeous! By the way, I would
also
like to
especially
thank you for organizing the trip to Venice canals for me
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because
I
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thought
that I was too tired to visit that
exceptionally
dreamy place. You all look
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so
great in those pictures!

However
, I am
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so
sorry that I could not write to you earlier as I
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got
insanely
busy with my works, emails and papers which I needed to take care of immediately after coming back from that holiday.
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But
, I
surely
would like for all of you to
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come
and visit me in the
next
month when my office will remain closed for a few days.

Yours
sincerely
,

Roger Stone
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some holiday photos. v. 9

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
193 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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