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I want to divide the presentation into three parts, including general information about possible risk factors, some details on how the injuries can be gotten and, finally, a description of preventive measures.

I want to divide the presentation into three parts, including general information about possible risk factors, some details on how the injuries can be gotten and, finally, a description of preventive measures. a7E79
Dear Mr Smith, I have recently attended a conference about labour safety in a factory, and I would like to make a presentation on the topic for the personnel. The lecturer at the conference told about the initial measures how to avoid the majority of prospective injuries I take the view that the information would be extremely useful for the employees. Moreover, awareness amongst the staff could significantly decrease the risk of plausible suits concerning received traumas during the work. It would be a good idea to organize the presentation before the start of the peak season when most of all accidents happen. I offer to arrange the event on either the second or the fifth of August, which are Friday and Monday respectively. If you require any further information, please contact me. I am looking forward to your reply. gghd Yours sincerely, Tatyana Bikmeyeva.
Dear Mr Smith,

I have recently attended a conference about
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labour
safety in a factory, and I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a presentation on the topic for the personnel. The lecturer at the conference
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
about the initial measures how to avoid the majority of prospective
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injuries


I take the view that the information would be
extremely
useful for the employees.
Moreover
, awareness amongst the staff could
significantly
decrease the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of plausible suits concerning received traumas during the work.

It would be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to organize the presentation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
of the peak season when most of all accidents happen. I offer to arrange the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
on either the second or the fifth of August, which are Friday and Monday
respectively
.

If you require any
further
information,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
contact me. I am looking forward to your reply.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
gghd


Yours
sincerely
,

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Tatyana
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Bikmeyeva
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IELTS letter I want to divide the presentation into three parts, including general information about possible risk factors, some details on how the injuries can be gotten and, finally, a description of preventive measures.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
145 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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