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I am writing this letter in regard to your advertisement in a magazine that you require a care-taker for your child.

I am writing this letter in regard to your advertisement in a magazine that you require a care-taker for your child. VE1VD
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter in regard to your advertisement in a magazine that you require a care-taker for your child. I would like to apply for this job as I really like spending time with toddlers and instantly share a good bond with them right after initial 1 or 2 meetings. I have a bachelor degree in education field and have 2 years prior experience working with a primary school where I was taking care of students from age groups 3 to 6 years. As I am currently planning to get admission in one of the Australian University, it would be a great opportunity for me to have a temporary job with my studies. I can take care of your child when you are away for work and then continue with the studies in my free time. I have enclosed my resume for your reference. I would look forward to hearing from you. Your faithfully, Samantha Williams
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter in regard to your advertisement in a magazine that you require a care-taker for your child.

I would like to apply for this job as I
really
like spending time with toddlers and
instantly
share a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
bond with them right after initial 1 or 2 meetings.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have a bachelor degree in education field and have 2 years prior experience working with a primary school where I was taking care of students from age groups 3 to 6 years.

As I am
currently
planning to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
admission in one of the Australian University, it would be a great opportunity for me to have a temporary job with my studies. I can take care of your child when you are away for work and then continue with the studies in my free time.

I have enclosed my resume for your reference.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would look forward to hearing from you.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
faithfully
,

Samantha Williams
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IELTS letter I am writing this letter in regard to your advertisement in a magazine that you require a care-taker for your child.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
161 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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