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letter to a couple looking for a caretaker for the child

letter to a couple looking for a caretaker for the child Gr1mQ

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter in regard to your advertisement in a magazine that you require a care-taker for your child. I would like to apply for this job as I really like spending time with toddlers and instantly share a good bond with them right after initial 1 or 2 meetings. I have a bachelor degree in education field and have 2 years prior experience working with a primary school where I was taking care of students from age groups 3 to 6 years. As I am currently planning to get admission in one of the Australian University, it would be a great opportunity for me to have a temporary job with my studies. I can take care of your child when you are away for work and then continue with the studies in my free time. I have enclosed my resume for your reference and would look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Samantha Williams

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter in regard to your advertisement in a magazine that you require a care-taker for your child.

I would like to apply for this job as I really
 like spending time with toddlers and instantly
 share a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 bond with them right after initial 1 or 2 meetings.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 have a bachelor degree in education field and have 2 years prior experience working with a primary school where I was taking care of students from age groups 3 to 6 years.

As I am currently
 planning to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 admission in one of the Australian University, it would be a great opportunity for me to have a temporary job with my studies. I can take care of your child when you are away for work and then continue with the studies in my free time.

I have enclosed my resume for your reference and would look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully
,

Samantha Williams

IELTS letter letter to a couple looking for a caretaker for the child

Letter

American English

8 paragraphs

161 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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