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I am writing a reply to your letter asking for a piece of advice, whether to go to college or try to get a job. In my opinion, trying to get a job is better for you, and I would like to state the reasons why.

I am writing a reply to your letter asking for a piece of advice, whether to go to college or try to get a job. In my opinion, trying to get a job is better for you, and I would like to state the reasons why. Gweaj
Dear Mr. Hassan, I am writing a reply to your letter asking for a piece of advice, whether to go to college or try to get a job. In my opinion, trying to get a job is better for you, and I would like to state the reasons why. At first, I will mention the disadvantages of going to college. You would not probably enjoy it, as in a college, especially a Japanese college, you could only meet people around the same age as you. You must have already met with such people in your high or junior school. In addition to it, many students tend to have fun with friends besides the study. Therefore, it is pretty challenging to get admission to Japanese colleges, but to a graduate, it is not very difficult. For that reason, many students tend to have to enjoy having parties, going out, going travel. However, college would cost a huge of money for you. The fee of it is not cheap, of course. Consequently, I think it would be a waste of money to go to college. Secondly, I would tell you why getting a job is a good idea for you. The most valuable is experience. Unlike college, you can see numerous people from a different age than you. By talking with them, you can get a lot of knowledge of life, which would be good for you. Not only from people, but you can also bring significant experience from working. For example, you could know how different to earn money, and you can learn the various social systems. Lastly, I would recommend which jobs would suit you, as you have excellent speaking power, and would advise you to apply for a receptionist job in a school or a five-star hotel. By this, you can meet not only your colleague but also with many other people of customers. In conclusion, you should try to get a job for these reasons. Good luck to you.
Dear Mr. Hassan,

I am writing a reply to your letter asking for a piece of advice, whether to go to college or try to
get
a
job
. In my opinion, trying to
get
a
job
is better for you, and I would like to state the reasons why.

At
first
, I will mention the disadvantages of going to college. You would not
probably
enjoy it, as in a college,
especially
a Japanese college, you could
only
meet
people
around the same age as you. You
must
have already met with such
people
in your high or junior school.
In addition
to it,
many
students tend to have fun with friends
besides
the study.
Therefore
, it is pretty challenging to
get
admission to Japanese colleges,
but
to a graduate, it is not
very
difficult. For that reason,
many
students tend to
have to
enjoy having parties, going out, going travel.
However
, college would cost
a huge of
money for you. The fee of it is not
cheap
,
of course
.
Consequently
, I
think
it would be a waste of money to go to college.

Secondly
, I would
tell
you why getting a
job
is a
good
idea
for you. The most valuable is experience. Unlike college, you can
see
numerous
people
from a
different
age than you. By talking with them, you can
get
a lot of
knowledge of life, which would be
good
for you. Not
only
from
people
,
but
you can
also
bring significant experience from working.
For example
, you could know how
different
to earn money, and you can learn the various social systems.

Lastly
, I would recommend which
jobs
would suit you, as you have excellent speaking power, and would advise you to apply for a receptionist
job
in a school or a five-star hotel. By this, you can
meet
not
only
your colleague
but
also
with
many
other
people
of customers.

In conclusion
, you should try to
get
a
job
for these reasons.
Good
luck to you.
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IELTS letter I am writing a reply to your letter asking for a piece of advice, whether to go to college or try to get a job. In my opinion, trying to get a job is better for you, and I would like to state the reasons why.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
331 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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