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I am writing a letter to you about my feeling from your concert that I have been very interested in your singing after your last Saturday's concert.

I am writing a letter to you about my feeling from your concert that I have been very interested in your singing after your last Saturday's concert. 63Px
Dear Andy, I am writing a letter to you about my feeling from your concert that I have been very interested in your singing after your last Saturday's concert. Actually, I am one of your fans that I really would like to listen to your awesome songs and also you sing very well. Not only you performed singing so awesome but also looked so handsome. On the other hand, I have something to tell you that I really would like to find some friends who are suitable to become my music band, which will be gathered by 4 persons including me as the main singer. In fact, I have graduated with my bachelor's degree with a major in music in the university and so I really would like to develop my music career for my dream. Thus, I hope that you can give me some suggestions for my music. For example, how can I choose someone who is suitable for being my band? and also how can I develop my music band once I have found enough suitable persons to join my band? and at last, what should I do that I can grow up my future band? Finally, I must appreciate you if you can help me and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Newton
Dear Andy,

I am writing a letter to you about my feeling from your concert that I have been
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very
interested in your singing after

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your
last Saturday's concert.

Actually, I am one of your fans that I
really
would like to listen to your awesome songs and
also
you sing
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very
well. Not
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only
you performed singing
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so
awesome
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also
looked
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so
handsome.

On the other hand
, I have something to
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tell
you that I
really
would like to find
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some
friends who are suitable to become my
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music
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band
, which will
be gathered
by 4 persons including me as the main singer. In fact, I have graduated with my bachelor's degree with a major in
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music
in the
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university and
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so
I
really
would like to develop my
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music
career for my dream.
Thus
, I hope that you can give me
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some
suggestions for my
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music
.
For example
, how can I choose someone who is suitable for being my
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band
?
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and
also
how can I develop my
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music
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band
once I have found
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enough
suitable persons to
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join
my
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band
?
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and
at last, what should I do that I can grow up my future band?

Finally
, I
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must
appreciate you if you can
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help
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me and
I am looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Newton
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IELTS letter I am writing a letter to you about my feeling from your concert that I have been very interested in your singing after your last Saturday's concert.

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  American English
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220 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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