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Hello Everybody Subject: Food on Picnic This year picnic was great as compare to others. The food from different continent was also amazing. I almost enjoy the all kind of food which had over the occasion. Even, I learn some indian word which help me to interact with my friend. Also, the photos of all of us together near to the beach its look like a family reunion. it is one of unforgettable memory. In my point of view, we missed the ingredients list put over the dishes. As matter of concern, i am allergic from the nuts and seafood. As we brought our children on the picnic some of are also has a allergies of some ingredient which could make a severe condition for the children. that is my concern regarding to the people who did not write the name of the ingredients. There is some thing which we would probably do on our next year. First, we can make a website where we can write everything about our potluck dish and mention the ingredient name. And we can put a list of the ingredients

Hello Everybody Subject: Food on Picnic This year picnic was great as compare to others. The food from different continent was also amazing. I almost enjoy the all kind of food which had over the occasion. Even, I learn some indian word which help me to interact with my friend. Also, the photos of all of us together near to the beach its look like a family reunion. it is one of unforgettable memory. In my point of view, we missed the ingredients list put over the dishes. As matter of concern, i am allergic from the nuts and seafood. As we brought our children on the picnic some of are also has a allergies of some ingredient which could make a severe condition for the children. that is my concern regarding to the people who did not write the name of the ingredients. There is some thing which we would probably do on our next year. First, we can make a website where we can write everything about our potluck dish and mention the ingredient name. And we can put a list of the ingredients 855bB
Hello Everybody Subject: Food on Picnic This year picnic was great as compare to others. The food from different continent was also amazing. I almost enjoy the all kind of food which had over the occasion. Even, I learn some indian word which help me to interact with my friend. Also, the photos of all of us together near to the beach its look like a family reunion. it is one of unforgettable memory. In my point of view, we missed the ingredients list put over the dishes. As matter of concern, i am allergic from the nuts and seafood. As we brought our children on the picnic some of are also has a allergies of some ingredient which could make a severe condition for the children. that is my concern regarding to the people who did not write the name of the ingredients. There is some thing which we would probably do on our next year. First, we can make a website where we can write everything about our potluck dish and mention the ingredient name. And we can put a list of the ingredients over the dish so parents and children can read it and adding in this we can also highlighted the allergies ingredient with red color. in next year, we should have to look some big empty place near to the sea or river. where we can see the sunset in the ocean. Thank you for reading this message satinderjeet singh
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Subject: Food on Picnic

This year picnic was great as compare to others. The food from
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different
continent was
also
amazing. I almost enjoy the all kind of food which had over the occasion. Even, I learn
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some
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indian
word which
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help
me to interact with my friend.
Also
, the photos of all of us together near to the beach its look like a family reunion.
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it
is one of unforgettable memory.

In my point of view, we missed the
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ingredients
list put over the dishes. As matter of concern,
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i
am allergic from the nuts and seafood. As we brought our children on the picnic
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some
of are
also
has
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a allergies
of
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ingredient
which could
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make
a severe condition for the children.
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that
is my concern
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regarding to
the
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people
who did not write the name of the ingredients.

There is
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some thing
which we would
probably
do on our
next
year.
First
, we can
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make
a website where we can write everything about our potluck dish and mention the
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ingredient
name. And we can put a list of the
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ingredients
over the dish
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so
parents and children can read it and adding in this we can
also
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highlighted
the
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allergies
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ingredient
with red color.
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in
next
year, we should
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have to
look
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some
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big
empty place near to the sea or river.
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where
we can
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see
the sunset in the ocean.

Thank you for reading this message

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IELTS letter Hello Everybody Subject: Food on Picnic This year picnic was great as compare to others. The food from different continent was also amazing. I almost enjoy the all kind of food which had over the occasion. Even, I learn some indian word which help me to interact with my friend. Also, the photos of all of us together near to the beach its look like a family reunion. it is one of unforgettable memory. In my point of view, we missed the ingredients list put over the dishes. As matter of concern, i am allergic from the nuts and seafood. As we brought our children on the picnic some of are also has a allergies of some ingredient which could make a severe condition for the children. that is my concern regarding to the people who did not write the name of the ingredients. There is some thing which we would probably do on our next year. First, we can make a website where we can write everything about our potluck dish and mention the ingredient name. And we can put a list of the ingredients

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