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As part of a student social survey project, you are organizing a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available.

As part of a student social survey project, you are organizing a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available. 2NWk
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing as the public relations officer of the Art Department of the University of Scotland to request for information as regards visitation to the upcoming exhibition. A group of students from our institution have shown interest and registered for the upcoming exhibition with me but I believe we can have more students to attend this event provided we have details such as contents of the exhibition. Contents such as Fashion fair/show, Food exhibition, Art Display and traditional dances are what we would like to experience. The opening and closing date of this fair is required when sharing details to us to enable us plan accordingly. However, the price for the exhibition seems high to what students can afford. Kindly share if there are discounts available for students and group visits. I can assure the lower the price the higher the number of visits from here. I am looking forward to a response from you as soon as possible to ease our planning. Yours Sincerely, Ahmed
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing as the public relations officer of the Art Department of the University of Scotland to request for information as regards visitation to the upcoming exhibition.

A group of
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students
from our institution have shown interest and registered for the upcoming exhibition with me
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but
I believe we can have more
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students
to attend this
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event
provided we have
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details
such as contents of the exhibition. Contents such as Fashion
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fair
/
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show
, Food exhibition, Art Display and traditional dances are what we would like to experience. The opening and closing date of this
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fair
is required
when sharing
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details
to us to enable us plan
accordingly
.

However
, the price for the exhibition seems high to what
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students
can afford. Kindly share if there are discounts available for
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students
and group visits. I can assure the lower the price the higher the number of visits from here.

I am looking forward to a response from you as
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soon
as possible to
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ease
our planning.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Ahmed

IELTS letter As part of a student social survey project, you are organizing a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available.

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