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You are a foreign student. You want to join a club or society so that you can enjoy your time when you study there.write to the student union manager.introduce yourself. Write about your hobbies and interests. Ask for information about clubs and societies.

You are a foreign student. You want to join a club or society so that you can enjoy your time when you study there. write to the student union manager. introduce yourself. Write about your hobbies and interests. Ask for information about clubs and societies. nk8E
Dear sir, I am a new student of university in hotel management. I am going to start my classes from april. Aa I am intersted in joining any of club or society because there must be free time from studies so I want to utilise that time in better way. My hobby is to play football in free time as I am champion in my previous school. I am also intrested in cooking because I prefer to make my food in my own way. I prefer making dises with experiment. Every one should persue some of the hobbies and interests what ever they want. I want to make a request to send me detail information about all the facilities which are provided by the university in clubs and societies as i want to become a member to one of those. You can email me these details on my email id- jyotidahiya@yahoo. com. I look forward for your reply. Your sinceraly, Jyoti Dahiya
Dear sir, I am a new student of university in hotel management. I am going to
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start
my classes from
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april
.
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Aa
I am
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intersted
in joining any of club or society
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because
there
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must
be free time from studies
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so
I
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want
to
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utilise
that time in better way. My hobby is to play football in free time as I am champion in my previous school. I am
also
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intrested
in cooking
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because
I prefer to
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make
my food in my
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own
way. I prefer making
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dises
with experiment. Every one should
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persue
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
hobbies and interests what ever they
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want
. I
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want
to
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make
a request to
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send
me detail information about all the facilities which
are provided
by the university in clubs and societies as
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to become a member to one of those. You can email me these
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details
on my email id-
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jyotidahiya@yahoo
.
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com
. I look forward for your reply. Your
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sinceraly
,
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Jyoti
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Dahiya

IELTS letter You are a foreign student. You want to join a club or society so that you can enjoy your time when you study there. write to the student union manager. introduce yourself. Write about your hobbies and interests. Ask for information about clubs and societies.

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  American English
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161 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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