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You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter, state your reason for writing describe the problems and explain how you feel propose a solution and risk the landlord to take action

You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter, state your reason for writing describe the problems and explain how you feel propose a solution and risk the landlord to take action De5k
Dear Mr John, I am writing as an occupant of your apartment in Brighton to complain about the prevailing issue with the bathroom water heater as all efforts to fix seems abortive. It is a very devastating situation for me and other flat mate as we are forced to bathe with cold water during this very cold weather condition. We spend a lot of time waiting for water to boil on the cooking stove which has lead to an increase in cost of cooking gas. The water heater seems to be running but never changes the temperature of the water. It is clearly understandable that you have involved quite a number of technicians, but they seem not to have tackled the issue with water heater as the situation continues to prevail. With my knowledge of engineering and heating process, I have previously discussed with one of the technicians to completely change the heating filaments and temperature gauge of the heater. I believe changing these components would serve as an overhauling process from the aged heater. This might be a high cost for maintenance but would definitely put a stop to the cost on weekly repairs. I look forward to hearing from you and also meeting you soon to discuss and show you how this problem can be fixed permanently. Yours Sincerely, Ahmed
Dear Mr John,

I am writing as an occupant of your apartment in Brighton to complain about the prevailing issue with the bathroom
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water
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heater
as all efforts to
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fix
seems abortive.

It is a
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very
devastating situation for me and other flat mate as we
are forced
to bathe with
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cold
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water
during this
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very
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cold
weather condition. We spend
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a lot of
time waiting for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
to boil on the cooking stove which has lead to an increase in cost of cooking gas. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
heater
seems to be running
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but
never
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changes
the temperature of the water.

It is
clearly
understandable that you have involved quite a number of technicians,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they seem not to have tackled the issue with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
heater
as the situation continues to prevail. With my knowledge of engineering and heating process, I have previously discussed with one of the technicians to completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the heating filaments and temperature gauge of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
heater
. I believe changing these components would serve as an overhauling process from the aged
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
heater
. This might be a high cost for maintenance
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
would definitely put a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
to the cost on weekly repairs.

I look forward to hearing from you and
also
meeting you
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soon
to discuss and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
you how this problem can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fixed
permanently
.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Ahmed
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IELTS letter You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter, state your reason for writing describe the problems and explain how you feel propose a solution and risk the landlord to take action

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  American English
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221 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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