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Application for the job of baby sitter

Application for the job of baby sitter wM3mr

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Divya & I am from India. I am a student of University of Australia & I also do part-time jobs to pay for my college in Australia. I saw your advertisement in the Australian Magazine and I have understood that you have been looking for someone to live with your family and look after your six-year-old child. I would really like to apply for this job since I also have an experience of working for a family who wanted me to baby-sit their child earlier this year and I really love looking after children. I also enjoy cooking, so I can be a great help to you to assist in your daily chores. Also I would like to add that in my free time I would like to study for my assignment submissions. Also I would like to go for shopping to just refresh my mind. Looking forward to hear from you. Thanking you in anticipation, Divya

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 refresh my mind. Looking forward In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".to hearing
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