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A letter of condolence. Your friend's dog has recently passed away.

A letter of condolence. Your friend's dog has recently passed away. R0GMP
Dear Mark, I would to express my deepest condolences to you and your family at this time. I am so grieved by this loss and hope this letter offers you some comfort. I want to share with you some memories I have of your dog, Bone. I saw him first time when you invited me in your new house. He was very active and friendly to me. I know how significant he was to you and your family. He is in the better place now. I think you need to take your mind off because you are stressed these days. So I was wondering if you wanted to go to the cinema with me tomorrow. I found a great movie there, and I am sure you will like it. We can also visit our friend Jake, he having party on the Sunday. It might help you be on the ball. Your friend always, Rodion
Dear Mark,

I would to express my deepest condolences to you and your family at this time. I am
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so
grieved by this loss and hope this letter offers you
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some
comfort.

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I
want to share with you
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some
memories I have of your dog, Bone.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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saw
him
first
time when you invited me in your new
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house
. He was
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very
active and friendly to me. I know how significant he was to you and your family. He is in the better place
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now
.

I
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think
you need to take your mind off
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because
you are
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stressed
these days.
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So
I was wondering if you wanted to go to the cinema with me tomorrow. I found a great movie there, and I am sure you will like it. We can
also
visit our friend Jake,
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he having
party on the Sunday. It might
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help
you be on the ball.

Your friend
The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
always
,

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Rodion
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IELTS letter A letter of condolence. Your friend's dog has recently passed away.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
153 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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