Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Zoos are harmful for animals and should be banned, do you agree or disagree?

Zoos are harmful for animals and should be banned, PVnwX
In this era animals don’t have a safest place to live because forest area is reducing. Some people believe that zoos should be banned and provide the rights to animals while other claim that zoos should not be banned. I believe that zoos should not be banned and authorities should change some minor changes and provide the animal free habitat. There are many reasons why zoos not be banned. Firstly, there are many advantages with zoos, these days due to deforestation forest are cutting down animals does not have a place to live and they are hunting. Till now many different types of species are Extincted. According to the report from the forest department, more than 80% of forest it deforested until 2015 and more than 500 types of species are Extincted. Secondly, these days authority of zoos providing a natural habitat to the animals and providing the free space like forest and giving a required food. In addition, forest department are saving many different types of species from danger. According to the survey conducted in African Zoo there are more than 600 types of species. Zoos are very important to these generation children where they can able to see different types of animals, birds and many more at one place. In conclusion, in this era Zoos are managed not only to exhibit them to people, but to save the species which are endangered from people and other animals. Zoos management should provide a natural environment to animals without claiming their rights.
In this era
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
don’t have
Use "the" with the superlative.
a
safest place to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forest
area is reducing.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that zoos should
be banned
and provide the rights to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
while other claim that zoos should not
be banned
. I believe that zoos should not
be banned
and authorities should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
minor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
and provide the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
free habitat. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
reasons why zoos not
be banned
.

Firstly
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
advantages with zoos, these days due to deforestation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forest
are cutting down
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
does not have a place to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
live and
they are hunting. Till
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
types
of species
are Extincted
. According to the report from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forest
department, more than 80% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forest
it deforested until 2015 and more than 500
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
types
of species
are Extincted
.

Secondly
, these
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "days'" or "day's"?
days
authority of zoos providing a natural habitat to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and providing the free space like
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forest
and giving a required food.
In addition
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
forest
department are saving
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
types
of species from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
. According to the survey conducted in African Zoo there are more than 600
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
types
of species. Zoos are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to these generation children where they
Please check whether one of these words is redundant.
can able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
types
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
, birds and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more at one place.

In conclusion
, in this era Zoos
are managed
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
to exhibit them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
to save the species which
are endangered
from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
. Zoos management should provide a natural environment to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
without claiming their rights.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Zoos are harmful for animals and should be banned,

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Zoos are harmful for animals and should be banned, do you agree or disagree?