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young people spend their time in shopping malls. this has negative effect on young people and society. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

young people spend their time in shopping malls. this has negative effect on young people and society. O82M
It is indeed that shopping malls is place where individuals get all the products under one roof. Adult consume their time in shopping malls. This has negative effect on youngsters and society. I disagree with this statement up to some extent. this essay will discuss in up coming paragraphs. To begin with, young wight spend their time in malls because more popular and person get all the iteam under one roof in the malls and malls give discount their regular customer due to this mankind save their money. Secondly, human do not need to go on different shops because in mall Gender get all the iteams at some pace due to this mankind save their time. Apart form this, in shopping malls individuals do enjoyment because in malls cinema and food point available and person can watch movies and eat food in shopping mall. Secondly, in shopping mall variety of products as well as superior quality available for Wight. on the other hand, if human consume ample time in shopping mall it effect on adults study and jobs because they do not concentrate on study and job due to this person bad perform in study as well as work and it is wastage of tie and money of individuals. To conclude, before my pen down i would like to say that in shopping mall person get all the things under one roof and in shopping mall variety of products available for Wight.
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indeed
that
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shopping
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malls
is place where individuals
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get
all the products under one roof. Adult consume their
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time
in
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shopping
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malls
. This has
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negative
effect on youngsters and society. I disagree with this statement up to
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some
extent.
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this
essay will discuss in up coming paragraphs. To
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begin
with, young wight spend their
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time
in
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malls
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because
more popular and
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person
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get
all the
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iteam
under one roof in the
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and
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malls
give discount their regular customer due to this mankind save their money.
Secondly
, human do not need to go on
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different
shops
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because
in
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mall
Gender
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get
all the
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iteams
at
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some
pace due to this mankind save their
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time
.
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this, in
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shopping
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malls
individuals do enjoyment
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because
in
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malls
cinema and food point available and
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person
can
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watch
movies and eat food in
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shopping
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mall
.
Secondly
, in
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variety of products
as well
as superior quality available for Wight.
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on
the other hand, if human consume ample
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time
in
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mall
it
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effect
on adults study and jobs
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because
they do not concentrate on study and job due to this
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person
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bad
perform in study
as well
as work and it is wastage of tie and money of individuals.
To conclude
,
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before
my pen down
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i
would like to say that in
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shopping
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mall
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person
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get
all the things under one roof and in
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shopping
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mall
variety of products available for Wight.
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IELTS essay young people spend their time in shopping malls. this has negative effect on young people and society.

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  American English
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242 words
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