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Ques 1. In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

Ques 1. In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this aR5V
Nowadays, traveling or working for a year before pursuing a university and after completing high school education becomes quite popular among young students in several countries. This essay will focus on the benefits and drawbacks of this trend. There are various advantages of taking a break in studies for a year from the pupil's career perspective. One of the chief merits of this trend, it enables students to develop more skills by gaining experience by employment. when school-going children travel or work, they get a lot of opportunities to interact with different types of people and tackle various life situations. Hence, it will definitely help them in their studies as well as improving their social skills. For instance, several studies show that students with prior experience or travel to other locations explore and have grown more in studies as compared to the continued pupils. As a result, students have learned problem-solving skills, decision-making skills, and ethics on how to work with other people while on duty. On the other hand, young adults who take a break from their studies for a year have more chances to break the rhythm in their studies. Some students start earning, eventually, they lack their interest in students. Moreover, some of them do not continue further studies and others give preference to money while studies that will lower scores in academics. As a result, without good academics, it is nearly impossible to get a white-collar job. So, the gap can affect harm the career of the student. In conclusion, taking a gap in studies has merits and demerits but it totally depends on the student's choices and will power how effectively to change the gap into considerable opportunities or failure in academics.
Nowadays, traveling or working for a year
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pursuing a university and after completing high school education becomes quite popular among young
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students
in several countries. This essay will focus on the benefits and drawbacks of this trend.

There are various advantages of taking a break in
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studies
for a year from the pupil's career perspective. One of the chief merits of this trend, it enables
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students
to develop more
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skills
by gaining experience by employment.
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when
school-going children travel or work, they
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get
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a lot of
opportunities to interact with
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different
types of
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people
and tackle various life situations.
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help
them in their
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studies
as well
as improving their social
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skills
.
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studies
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show
that
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students
with prior experience or travel to
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other
locations explore and have grown more in
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studies
as compared to the continued pupils.
As a result
,
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students
have learned
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problem-solving
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skills
, decision-making
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skills
, and ethics on how to work with
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other
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people
while on duty.

On the
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other
hand, young adults who take a break from their
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studies
for a year have more chances to break the rhythm in their
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studies
.
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Some
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students
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start
earning,
eventually
, they lack their interest in
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students
.
Moreover
,
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some
of them do not continue
further
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studies
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and others
give preference to money while
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studies
that will lower scores in academics.
As a result
, without
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good
academics, it is
nearly
impossible to
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get
a white-collar job.
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So
, the gap can affect harm the career of the student.

In conclusion
, taking a gap in
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studies
has merits and demerits
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but
it
totally
depends on the student's choices and will power how
effectively
to
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change
the gap into considerable opportunities or failure in academics.
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IELTS essay Ques 1. In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

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