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Young people should move out of the family home after graduating from high school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Young people should move out of the family home after graduating from high school. nRn5R

In the past, young people were likely to move out of their family after they graduating from high school. however in contemporary society teenager are choose to living with their parents. Meanwhile, they have to had more responsible and mature enough to living by their own in contrast, there are those people who think that fresh graduates should stay home after graduating high school until they are ready for face to modern world. I will give my opinion in the essay below. First, some of proposition believe that high school graduate is mature enough for move out of their family. due to, they can start making their own decisions and living. Moreover they also point out that by moving out of home can be less financial so which means as their parent no longer support their living expenses anymore. On the other hand, some of teenager are not mature enough to moving out of home therefore there are others to feel pressures to face a modern society and hardly to make their own decisions. Furthermore, they might not be able to effort their living costs. For examples internet bills, power bills and water bills. These bills are still not include personal use such as shower gel or washing powder that needed to purchase every month or two months. after I consider all passengers, I believe that teenager or fresh graduate should not be living by their own. There is notice able that some of them are not mature enough to looking after themselves and manage everything by their own.

In the past, young This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 were likely to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocate
move
 out of their family after Did you mean "they're graduating", "they are graduating", or "they were graduating"?they're graduatingthey are graduatingthey were graduating
they graduating
 from high school. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?however,
however
 in contemporary society This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenileadolescent
teenager
 are Consider using a past participle here: "chosen".chosen
choose
 to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbreathingcontemporary
living
 with their parents. Meanwhile, they This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 had more responsible and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmaturedsophisticated
mature
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsuitableamplesufficientfulladequateabundant
enough
 to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbreathingcontemporary
living
 by their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
in contrast
, there are those This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 who This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 that fresh graduates should stay home after The verb 'to graduate' requires the preposition 'from': "graduating from".graduating from
graduating
 high school until they are ready for face to modern world. I will give my opinion in the essay below.

First
, Consider using "some proposition" or "some of the proposition".some propositionsome of the proposition
some of proposition
 believe that high school graduate is You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmaturedsophisticated
mature
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsuitableamplesufficientfulladequateabundant
enough
 for This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocate
move
 out of their family. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterDue
due
 to, they can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 making their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 decisions and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbreathingcontemporary
living
. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Moreover,
Moreover
 they also
 point out that by moving out of home can be less financial This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 which means as their parent no longer support their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbreathingcontemporary
living
 expenses anymore.

On the other hand
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenileadolescent
teenager
 are not You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmaturedsophisticated
mature
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsuitableamplesufficientfulladequateabundant
enough
 to moving out of home therefore
 there are others to feel pressures to face a modern society and hardly to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 decisions. Furthermore
, they might not be able to effort their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbreathingcontemporary
living
 costs. For examples internet You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnotedebtcheckstatement
bills
, power You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnotedebtcheckstatement
bills
 and water You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnotedebtcheckstatement
bills
. These You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnotedebtcheckstatement
bills
 are still
 not include personal This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 such as shower gel or washing powder that needed to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
 every month or two months.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterAfter
after
 I consider all passengers, I believe that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenileadolescent
teenager
 or fresh graduate should not be You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbreathingcontemporary
living
 by their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
. There is notice able that This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 of them are not You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmaturedsophisticated
mature
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsuitableamplesufficientfulladequateabundant
enough
 to looking after themselves and manage everything by their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
. 